Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
While some people believe that by working in one secure job and leaving that position after finding a proper job one can prosper, there are a few numbers of people who claim that it is not convincing. To my way of thinking, waiting to acquire a convenient job is more reasonable approach than just occupying in one unfavorable secure job because not only working in unsatisfying vocation makes someone bored, but also it postpones the possibility of reaching to person's appropriate job.
The first reason which should be stated here is that when one works in a position which is not favorable for him, the job will be uneventful for him. For example, consider someone who is employed in one car manufacturing company. Some fixed wages is promised to him for a long specified time, instead, he should just work with one instrument as an operator for this long time. First, it seems that he will satisfy in a future because of safety life which he will have, yet in a long time he will lose his confidence about ability to do any other job and in a worse occasion he will understand that doing one job which is not his delightful job makes him tired and bored, so his purpose of working is just gain money without having any enjoyable time during his work. Since, as all we know, people spend much of their life on working, so one uninteresting job makes someone's life uneventful and weariful.
Another point worth discussing here is that occupying to one secure job reduces the opportunity of reaching to a satisfactory job. In my opinion, if one increases his endeavor to be strong enough in one field which is his favorite major, can access his proper job sooner. Moreover, someone who is working in one company and has a secure job such as the example of the last paragraph, often has a contract for working there. It means, as the company had promised him not to exclude him from his job for the specified time, he had promised to work there in that same time, too. Since, whenever he found his pleasant work, he could not leave his job till finishing the duration of his contract. As a result, by working in one unsatisfied secure job, he loses his chance of working in a proper job.
To summarize, as I mentioned, there are lots of reasons like, making the person bored and decreasing the chance of reaching to the proper job in a shorter time, which shows it is a high time one thought just acquiring of one secure job is enough for people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 557, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...bout ability to do any other job and in a worst occasion he will understand that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, while, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6123853211 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51075772289 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477064220183 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.9237200111 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.642857143 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1428571429 20.6045352989 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212900135082 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0984564426209 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455020617499 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152792922346 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369649120434 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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