Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and tasks and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
While there are some people who agree that by concentrating on one task one can boost her chance of succeeding, there are quite a few numbers of people who claim this is not convincing. To my way of thinking, by trying new objects one can increase her chance of prospering because not only does experience new things cause raising the possibility of succeeding from different ways but also performing different tasks increases the inspiring of people.
The first reason which should be stated here is that when someone experiences new approaches she can find a variety of ways that can boost her chance of succeeding. For example, consider one juvenile who decided to study airspace engineering field in the university, so she employs all her potential for passing her exams properly to accept in that field; however, she does not have require talent in math which is essential in this field, yet she was one of the best students in a piano class. Since, when she enters university, she finds that she is not appropriate for this major, and if she continues to study this filed just distract from succeeding. As a result, she decides to change her field of study into music, and she will prosper in that. So, it is clear that one multiple task person who did not focus just on one filed can success with more chance.
Another point worth discussing here is that by trying new tasks and making risk, one can have less eventful period, so she has much inspiration for executing new applications. I think, by concentrating on just one object because of lacking the possibility of unexpected results, someone just bored from that field. For example, when I was working in the library of the university, I should find some books in a vast variety of eras for the students. However, I had the authority to just work on the era of my field of study, and find the books for the related students, yet I decided to do this task for all students, as I realized if I had wanted to find similar books for students during one year, eventually I would have become bored and that job does not have any fun for me. Even though, by making the risk of working with other students from other fields that I do not know the name of their professors and books, I could have a better time.
To summarize, as I mentioned, there are lots of reason like, increasing the chance of being prosperous by experiencing new situations and rising the motivation in people which shows by trying a wider range of things, even though by making some risks one can have more probability of succeeding.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 384, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'required'.
Suggestion: required
... that field; however, she does not have require talent in math which is essential in th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, as for, for example, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2118.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65494505495 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58683652785 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472527472527 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.5091519696 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.923076923 100.406767564 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.0 20.6045352989 170% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38461538462 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111634129577 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464265105525 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444594373593 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0769071034009 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356761171951 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 58.1214874552 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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