Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about the events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life?
To my way of thinking, people should be conscious of the events which are happening around the world because by aware of the happening not only can they help to people who are struggling with some problems, but it also possible for people to transport to the locations of the happenings, so knowing the condition of those place is required.
The first reason which should be stated here is that people who are not involved in some events in the world can help others who are involved in. Today, there are lots of people in some parts of the world, who are suffering from some problems, and they are not advanced enough to solve their problems, so it is necessary others help them. For example, recently one kind of Flu, which named birds’ Flu, was spread in several poor African countries; however, they did not have required knowledge and necessary drugs to face with this kind of disease, so they needed other countries to help them. Therefore, it was needed people from all around the world get aware of that situation, and send their help as much as they could. If someone had the medical skill, he should make lots of research in order to find treatment ways, else, he could send some money in order to provide sanitary help. Therefore, it is clear that knowing the condition of other parts of the world can cause some important changes to occur.
Another point worth discussing here is that today a lot of people move from one part to another part of the world, so they should aware of the events may happen there. While, some people claim that knowing the events of some places do not have importance, for they did not occur in their locations, I am strongly opposed by this claim, since I think today transporting to other parts is more possible. For example, one of my friends went to one island in the Philippines in order to continue his study in the university. However, he did not know that volcano is a typical event there. Since, when he went there saw some specific construction of buildings, and when he asked others, recognized that this event is usual there, and understood he put himself in a dangerous condition without knowing how to behave, if once that happening occurs, so he tried to know how to face with this event. Actually, in our world, it is possible to face some events, even though they do not occur for us in our location.
To summarize, as I mentioned, there are several reasons, like helping to other people and the possibility of experiencing some happenings in other parts of the world, that’s why knowing the events of other parts of the world is important.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.656587473 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45229144454 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44060475162 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.4139746389 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.0 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0714285714 20.6045352989 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92857142857 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176186000064 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739101800745 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397820361097 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126568436825 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258475068196 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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