Our past experiences shape the way we look at people and the world around us.
What are some of the experiences that have shaped your outlook and the way you live now?
Use specific examples to support your answer.
Past experiences and past choices strongly influence our personality and our behavior in everyday life. Personally, there have been two main facts that have changed my mindset and my scale of value so far.
The first one is my sport career. I have been a high-level sailor for 14 years and I have traveled around the world for trainings and regattas. The first thing that I have learnt is resilience. To put it in other words: if you really believe in something you do not have to give up on it, even when everything is against you. Another lesson I have learnt is the sense of duty and responsibility, not only for myself but also for other people and for nature. As a consequence, today I feel really involved in earth care and I consider myself as an empathic person.
The second experience that has deeply shaped my personality is moving to Milan. When I was 14, I decided to move from Cagliari to Milan with my father because of my sailing career and other family problems. This change made me reflect a lot on many aspects. In particular it has been fundamental for me because I developed a personality and I have acquired independence both from places and people. I have discovered that even if friends are really important in our lives, we should not completely rely on them, but only on ourselves. Moreover, I discovered that we do not depend on the environment in which we are living, but just on who we really are interiorly. Thus, the greatest outcome of this happening was learning how my personality was, freed from every social influence. In my opinion, the self-awareness that I have gained during that period is currently shaping my everyday actions and the way I take decisions.
In conclusion, even if every moment of our life has some consequences on our personality, some of them are more important than others. In particular, my sailing career has helped me to acknowledge the value of other people and nature while the change of city made me realize the importance of having a strong identity.
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...of them are more important than others. In particular, my sailing career has helpe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, second, so, thus, while, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, in particular, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71267605634 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7934005601 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538028169014 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7739172193 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9444444444 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7222222222 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168879341963 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527535469142 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462120508033 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103734245724 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019246867542 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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