Our past experiences shape the way we look at people and the world around us.
What are some of the experiences that have shaped your outlook and the way you live now?
Use specific examples to support your answer.
Past experiences and in particular past choices strongly influence our personality and our behaviour in everyday life. Personally, there have been two main facts that have changed my mindset and my scale of value so far.
The first one is my sport career. I have been saling at a high level for 14 years, travelling around the world for trainings and regattas. The first thing that I have learnt is resilience. To put it in another words: if you really believe in something you do not have to give up on it, even when everything is against you. Another lesson I have learnt is the sense of duty and responsabilty, not only for myself but also for other people and for the nature. As a consequence, today I feel really involved in earth care and I consider myself as an empathic person.
The second experience that has shaped deeply my personality is moving to Milan. When I was 14 I decided to move from Cagliari to Milan with my father because of my sailing career and other family problems. This change made me reflect a lot on many aspects. In particular it has been fundamental for me because I developed a personality and an indipendency both from places and people. I have learnt that even if friends are really important in our life, we should not rely on them, but only on ourselves. Moreover, I discovered that we do not depend on the environment in which we are living, but just on who we are in our inner soul. Thus, the greatest outcome of this happening was learning how my personality was, freed from every social influence. In my opinion, this perception of myself currently shapes my everyday actions and the way I take decisions.
In conclusion, even if every moment of our life has some consequences on our personality, some of them are more important than others. In particular, my sailing career has helped me to develop a knowledge of the importance of other people and nature while the change of city made me realize the importance of myself and of my personality.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: Experiences
Past experiences and in particular past choices strongly...
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Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...of them are more important than others. In particular, my sailing career has helpe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, really, second, so, thus, while, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, in particular, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6384180791 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74460578728 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528248587571 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8132186698 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2222222222 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160514963035 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507171978118 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0470151122446 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972607159573 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247568926769 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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