Parents can no longer control what their children do; their behavior gets more affected by televisions, movies, and other influences from outside the home.
Due to progressively growth of technology, parents' controls on their children are more likely to be weakened today. Most kids are plugged into TVs, smartphone, etc. and sometimes in spite of parent's tendency they probably get effect of them. I absolutely agree with this idea and will cogently explicate my stance on this issue in what follows.
The first reason which shapes my outlook is that children are used to spending the most of their time in a day by watching television and movie. So, they get more affected by this Medias than take effect from their parents. Also, in their age, they often imitate superstar's actions of the movies and incline to act as them like dress in a way of heroes' clothe or maybe do hair cut at the same. Moreover, this situation may become worsen in a case when children watch horror movie and get effect by behaving aggressively. In all of aforementioned situation parents do not interfere, and they cannot prevent from the consequences even if they do not like it. A telling example is what I have undergone when I was 10 years old. I used to watch television after school and spent more than 4 hours a day watching TV's programs. Subsequently, this TVs show that maybe all of them might not be suitable for that age caused bad impact on my behavior specially manner of speaking. So I think my parents did not have any control on this case.
Another reason should be mentioned is that kids spend a large amount of their time in the school with their peers and teacher. Relatively, they learn from one other faster than their parents because they are at the same age and can understand each other better. Clearly, we can see kids around the same age use similar words or expressions and have their own special gestures. In some cases if they act improperly and this become prevalent between them, their parents need too much effort to fix it again.
In conclusion, parents' controls are falling because the new technologies are developing communication paths rapidly and these make children more social today than they were in the past in a way create their personality. Consequently, I agree that children get more affected by televisions, movies, etc. and parents cannot control it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 506, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s need too much effort to fix it again. In conclusion, parents controls are fall...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, look, may, moreover, so, i think, in conclusion, in some cases, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1839.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76424870466 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60410636681 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551813471503 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5066374247 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.95 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331153368531 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10070422928 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714814846816 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214632650625 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0448216996172 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.