Parents give their children weekly money to buy whatever they want. Some people think this can cause bad habits and idea about money in children. Others think the opposite. What’s your opinion?

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Parents give their children weekly money to buy whatever they want. Some people think this can cause bad habits and idea about money in children. Others think the opposite. What’s your opinion?

Since beginning the time, human being strived to improve their day-to-day life and bring more convenience to their lifestyle. Throughout history, the family has played prominent role in children training. children from early aged followed their parent behavior and have trust in them. For every healthy family must spend more time and attention to their children. In the modern society that we live in, money plays one important role in every family. I believe that giving children a lot of money has a bad effect on them. I believe they should be paid small quantities and as they need. I will explicate my point of view through 2 outstanding reasons.

The first I would like to bring here is that every child in every age needed money for candy, ice cream or PSP. parents can’t forbid their children from everything they want and definitely can’t buy them everything they want. I believe giving small quantities of money weekly has a good effect in children behaviors. this made children more responsible about what they have and cheer them to try for what they want. As a personal experience when I was a kid my father gave me some money weekly. I had to spend a whole week with that amount of money, with this perspective I had to manage my money through the week. If I wanted to buy something more expensive, I had to raise my money for buying that. this helps me now, as an adult too.

The second reason that is very important in my opinion is that giving high quantities of money will spoil the children, those who have more money than others never will understand the living best way. they think they can use the money for every wish and every problem.

children who don’t receive any money from their parents in most cases have some mental problem like stress and panic attack because of the problem of mistrust. I believe all parents should control their children as much as possible.

To wrap it up, I agree that raising children is very important. Honestly, it is one of the most important parent’s duties. children are so sensitive and everything has a direct impact on their brain in adulthood life. For this reason, parents should spend more time and attention to their behaviors. Good parents can use everything for their children prosperity; it is no secret that money is a very influential part of today’s life. so it is better that parents control their own behaviors to better future of a good child.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Children
...ed prominent role in children training. children from early aged followed their parent b...
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...paid small quantities and as they need. I will explicate my point of view through...
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Suggestion: Parents
...eded money for candy, ice cream or PSP. parents can't forbid their children from e...
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...as a good effect in children behaviors. this made children more responsible about wh...
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...d cheer them to try for what they want. As a personal experience when I was a kid ...
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... had to raise my money for buying that. this helps me now, as an adult too. The s...
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..., those who have more money than others never will understand the living best way. they think they ca...
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...er will understand the living best way. they think they can use the money for every ...
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Suggestion: Children
...ey for every wish and every problem. children who don't receive any money from t...
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...he most important parent's duties. children are so sensitive and everything has a d...
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... influential part of today's life. so it is better that parents control their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, honestly, if, second, so, in most cases, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76995305164 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48917513618 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492957746479 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.5620101322 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.1538461538 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3846153846 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.34615384615 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424712618049 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114389107682 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703121087299 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241998642089 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670617884132 0.0645574589148 104% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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