The way that parents should financially support their children is a challenging debate and also a personal choice. While many people give their children pocket money for fulfilling their needs, some people like me, argue that it is not the best way to satisfy children's demands because it can be harmful and dangerous for children’s future life. Accordingly, in the subsequent paragraphs, this idea will be explained in more depth.
Uncontrolled providing money to children can destroy their future financial life. This way of supporting lets the children imagine that there is always plenty of money for them, so there is no need to even think about how they should make money. In other words, this will make children dependent on their parents and renders them absurdly optimistic about life and its aspects. Drawing from my own experience, I had a friend who is almost thirty now, and he still gets money from his parents. He would be an independent person, in the case that his parents provided his needs in a controlled manner.
In addition to financial dependency, when money is available for children without monitoring, it may lead them to participate in illegal activities. In fact, children can be deceived easily, especially when someone makes a situation or event enticing for them. For instance, they can be seduced by drugs and alcohol. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, a lot of my friends had been involved with drug addiction at a tender age, and unfortunately, they ruined the best years of their lives. Therefore, unmanaged providing money for children could have destroyable effects on their life.
Thus, with the above in mind, parents who are providing weekly money to their children for spending as their desire are not conscious about the risks of their method. This unmanaged manner can decimate the financial independence of their children, and get them involved in illegitimacy.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07902735562 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77144317226 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568389057751 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.7844946027 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.4375 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5625 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0625 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.353238712322 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119330422531 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0756523986878 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235565094323 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457494417106 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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