Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so

Choosing a suitable major for studying has always been paramount of importance for everyone in modern society. This issue is crucial due to its significant impact on the future of every individual's life. Following that, the controversial question which arises here is: What is the best option for studying? A major which requires to dedicate many years but with more future opportunities or a major that needs fewer years of study and you can find the job with it immediately after graduation? Although some people believed that the first option is superior; since one would become an expert in her/his field and he/she could save more money, to the best of my knowledge, I prefer study a major which is shorter in time and allows me to get into the job instantaneously after getting my degree.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that when someone has the opportunity to get a job soon after her graduation, she has more time to gain experience in her field of study. On the other hand, she can expand her network by meeting experts and ask them for help. As a result, network expansion provides her more opportunities which leads her business to thrive just in a few years after she commenced her first job. Drawing from my own experience, my father has finished his bachelor’s degree in civil engineering which needs a relatively short duration of study in comparison with medical degrees, and then, he quickly started her job by constructing a small house in our neighborhood. After that, he has developed his business with the help of more expert people in his field. Now, he is one of the most reputed engineers in high rise building construction in the city.
The second noteworthy reason is that choosing a major which has a short duration and excellent potential for work (soon after graduation) allows you to save more money since you get into work sooner. As a result, you would have more deposit money, so it provides you the opportunity to invest in some other profitable businesses rather than your primary job. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, a friend of mine who has been graduated from college started his job in his father store soon after graduation; meanwhile, he began to save money, and invested in market. After two years, now, he can buy a car only with the money he saved and invested in stock market.
Thus, with the above in mind, it is clear why someone should choose a major which have shorter duration and job opportunities soon after graduation; since she could become more expert in a shorter time and save more money.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...gnificant impact on the future of every individuals life. Following that, the controversial...
Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'dedicating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: dedicating
...on for studying? A major which requires to dedicate many years but with more future opportu...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, then, thus, while, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2189.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7380952381 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64942226794 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480519480519 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.5446654715 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.764705882 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1764705882 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52941176471 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235870000857 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.076437471024 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655598693078 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151650854705 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.080042698628 0.0645574589148 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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