Your friend has the opportunity to choose either one of two types of majors (fields of study), which one of the following two majors do you think is a better choice, and why?
A major that would allow him to finish years of study and get a degree sooner (so that he would begin to work full-time quickly). Or
A major that requires many years of study that would provide him with more employment opportunities and offers in the future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Be sure to use your own words. Do not memorize some certain examples.
Job is of the most critical things in one’s life. Although, the importance of getting more knowledge in university could not be negleted, having job is more important for the experiences that one can be gained, the money can be saved and as the main reason, the social activities can be learned.
First of all, the unblievable results of the study of many successful managers in the first 100 prospuros companies around the world, reveals that more than 40 percent of them haven’t had high level of academical degree. Thus, the suprising results make people to pay more attentions on the importance of experiences in one’s success. Therefore, I absolutely recommend my friend to study in a university which can be graduated as soon as possible. Then, when he find a job, he should try to get as much experiences as he can which lead him to a promising future of success.
Secondly, earning and saving money could be a contributing factor in everyone’s decisions. Needless to say, every one should work because no one is going to support them financially. Morover, my friend have been alone since he was child and he never get any support from his parents and family. So, in my idea, it is better for him to get graduated as soon as possible and try to find a full-time job.
Finally, not any theoritical courses do be able to thoroughly teach one how to interact with others. And this valuable asset whould not be available but in a real circumstances. From my perspective, not only my friend, but every one should soon get into the wolrd of learning new things about social acitivies which are not easy to learn them.
Briefly, In my idea, being graduated soon is more essential because of experince, money and social skills. If one have these three things, he would have been successful in his life and would have had more carrier offers, neverthless of what his educational degree is.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'finds'.
Suggestion: finds
...ated as soon as possible. Then, when he find a job, he should try to get as much exp...
^^^^
Line 3, column 509, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... he find a job, he should try to get as much experiences as he can which lead him to...
^^^^
Line 5, column 256, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...n alone since he was child and he never get any support from his parents and family...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81818181818 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7996195465 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6431524383 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131237838916 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0482338857699 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0309082638791 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.078084754962 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203723649409 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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