In the past people ate food that was better for their health than they do today.
Since the dawn of civilization hitherto, the food we have been eating has been crucial to our survival. People’s health is strongly dependent on the food that they eat. Many people believe that what we eat today is healthier than what people usually ate in the past. However, I am of the opinion that today’s food is not as healthy as what our ancestors used to eat. That’s due to the fact that most types of commonly consumed foods today are preprocessed. Moreover, having less time to cook a meal, people consume more fast food. Following illustrations demonstrate my idea.
One imperative reason coming to mind at first is that, what we eat as food today is mostly preprocessed. Alternatively stated, most foods, being eaten by people today, have already suffered various types of changes. Changes such as adding additives for conservation or artificial tastes, reduce the quality of the food. For instance, my father once told me that when he was a child, the only type of meat they ate was fresh and unprocessed meat from butchery. Conversely, what we eat as meat today can vary from hamburger to sausages and many other types of meat. Clearly, these types of preprocessed foods contain various types of additives. Although these additives have been qualified by health care organizations, but there has always been some news about how some specific type of additive, which had not been considered as hazardous, was actually harmful to our health. For example, 2 years ago, a specific type of artificial taste, which had been widely used in nectars and drinks, was proved to increase the chance of cancer. Therefore, adding additives and preprocessing foods have decreased their quality.
Second, it is a deniable fact that spending a lot of time in traffic and at work, people don’t like to spend much time on cooking their meal. Thus, eating fast food has been drastically increasing during the last decades. It has been proved that eating fast food frequently, can result in obesity. This is mostly due to the oil in which fast food is fried or cooked. Additionally, doctors always talk about how obesity increases the chance of many diseases, such as heart attack and high blood pressure. For example, I have a friend who used to eat fast food a lot, when he was a child. Consequently, he has been suffering from obesity and now, after 20 years, struggling with high blood pressure is he. Hence, eating fast foods has become a serious problem for people’s health.
In conclusion, what we consume as food today is getting increasingly less and less healthy. That’s mostly due to the preprocessed food ingredients that we use in cooking, as well as the huge amount of fast food we eat today. Consequently, I suggest that we should take some steps back and make some change in our diet. It seems that the best way, is the most natural way, and the most natural way is the way our ancestors took.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, conversely, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2442.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87425149701 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71506687966 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499001996008 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 741.6 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7524617391 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2142857143 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8928571429 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21428571429 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281729017757 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810652293154 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663585989313 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175123255899 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709640213493 0.0645574589148 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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