Some adults believe that nowadays children’s behavior is worse than children’s behavior was in the past. These adults have suggested three actions that parents can do to help children ages 5–10 behave better (for example, by speaking more respectfully to adults or acting more kindly toward other children). Which ONE action that parents can do might have the most positive effect on their children’s behavior? Why?
In recent year, there has been a debate on how to make children behave better. Some people believe that limiting children to specific types of movies and television programs is the best idea, whereas, some others think supervising children when they are playing games with other children is the most effective solution. However, I firmly believe that in order to make children behave respectfully, parents need to spend more time talking with them. That is due to the fact that at ages around 5 to 10, children don’t like to be limited or supervised in any sense. Furthermore, they are mostly inclined to copy behavior they find desirable and talking with them is a great way to show them this behavior. Following illustrations demonstrate this Idea.
First and foremost, most children are willing to be as free as possible. Thus, they might get defensive when we try to limit them in any way. Put differently, if parents set restricted laws for what they can watch on television or in movies, they might try to oppose against these restrictions by doing them in secret. An example from my own experience can elaborate this point. My nephew was so stubborn because he had been banned by his parents from watching a television series called Game of Thrones. Actually, he had been downloading and watching the series for some weeks in secret. After consulting with a consultant, he implied that most of what he was doing was copied from a character in that series. The consultant said that he was just behaving that way because he needed to recover his limited freedom. Accordingly, whatever that makes children feel limited can deteriorate the situation.
Second, children like to copy the behavior they find desirable. Moreover, talking to them is a great example for a good and respectful behavior, which is likely to be copied by them. In other words, when you talk to children respectfully and ask them nicely to behave better, or when you give them examples of rude and respectful behavior, they will definitely find your behavior toward the situation desirable. Hence, they are very likely to try to be respectful like you. For instance, my cousins’ wife, who was a mature and well-behaved person, used to talk to her son very nicely and respectfully whenever he had done something wrong. Surprisingly, the child understood her well. Additionally, he was always willing to accept his mistakes and apologized for them. Consequently, treating children with respect and talking to them instead of limiting them or supervising them can help them a lot to behave themselves.
In conclusion, it is not a good idea to limit children’s freedom or supervise their behavior in order to make them treat others with respect. Instead, talking to them with respect can be the most effective way to make them behave themselves.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, well, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2370.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81331467259 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491561181435 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1108599028 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.8 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.96 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264728985757 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825868160202 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557808087899 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181782802521 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0525928657744 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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