In the past people ate food that was better for their health than they do today. 3
People’s health is strongly dependent on the food that they eat. Many people believe that what we eat today is healthier than what people usually ate in the past. However, I am of the opinion that today’s food is not as healthy as what our ancestors used to eat. That’s due to the fact that most types of commonly consumed foods today are preprocessed. Moreover, having less time to cook a meal, people consume more fast food. Following illustrations demonstrate my idea.
First, it is a deniable fact that what we eat as food today is mostly preprocessed. Alternatively stated, most foods, being eaten by people today, have already suffered various types of changes. Changes such as adding additives for conservation or artificial tastes, reduce the quality of the food. For instance, my father once told me that when he was a child, the only type of meat they ate was fresh and unprocessed meat from butchery. Conversely, what we eat as meat today can vary from hamburger to sausages and many other types of meat. Clearly, these types of preprocessed foods contain various types of additives. Although these additives have been qualified by health care organizations, but there has always been some news about how some specific type of additive, which had not been considered as hazardous, was actually harmful to our health. For example, 2 years ago, a specific type of artificial taste, which had been widely used in nectars and drinks, was proved to increase the chance of cancer. Therefore, adding additives and preprocessing foods have decreased their quality.
Second, spending a lot of time in traffic and at work, people don’t like to spend much time on cooking their meal. Thus, eating fast food has been drastically increasing during the last decades. It has been proved that eating fast food frequently, can result in obesity. This is mostly due to the oil in which fast food is fried or cooked. Additionally, doctors always talk about how obesity increases the chance of many diseases, such as heart attack and high blood pressure. For example, I have a friend who used to eat fast food a lot, when he was a child. Consequently, he has been suffering from obesity and now, after 20 years, struggling with high blood pressure is he. Hence, eating fast foods has become a serious problem for people’s health.
In conclusion, what we consume as food today is getting increasingly less and less healthier. That’s mostly due to the preprocessed food ingredients that we use in cooking, as well as the huge amount of fast food we eat today.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 79, Rule ID: LESS_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Non-standard use of the comparative or superlative. Did you mean 'less healthy'?
Suggestion: less healthy
... today is getting increasingly less and less healthier. That's mostly due to the preproce...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, conversely, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94022988506 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76236718773 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514942528736 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.1025389967 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.96 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.96 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304430135986 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0901818825719 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652181631121 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192938801525 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655263658116 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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