People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Why do many people attend college or university in contemporary? Some believe that they are driven by the desire to acquire new knowledge, while other might think that they want to gain more experience. In my opinion, however, I believe that people attend college in order to ensure their future careers. I would illustrate the reasons in the following passages.
First of all, the learning experience is very important when applying jobs. Almost all of the employers would select their employees based on their learning experience and degree level. In this highly competitive world, it is hard to find an ideal, high-income job without bachelor degree. Thus many people would positively seek to enter the college to make sure they would have a great future career.
In addition, the friends people made in college and university are also critical to their future. If you own a company, they might become your partners or customers after entering the market. If you want to be a normal employee, they might give you some useful information and help you to find a job. For instance, my uncle owns a big company which product the electronic devices. Most of his coworkers are his classmate in his university. The university gives people a chance to collaborate with others who have the same major and common interest.
Finally, the most important reason is that college could enrich people’s knowledge and broaden their horizons, thus they would have more opportunity to make innovation and become successful. For example, Martin Zuckerburg found the inspiration of developing social network in his university. The energetic environment and the solid knowledge it provides give people boundless energy to make innovation and progression.
In a nut shell, I believe that people attend to university is due to they went to ensure their future career. The university and college gives people a chance to meet others, and certificate their learning experience, and give them a lot of knowledge. All of them are benifitial to their future career.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in addition, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1497005988 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75708189788 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532934131737 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.9263951868 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309082161579 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942878841051 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0986416979212 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173387164236 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0741121992168 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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