People in daily lives would frequently do the jobs that need creativity, such as the job you have never done before. Under this circumstance, do you prefer to work alone or work with others?
Nowadays, people are bustling with a myriad of works to do. To finish those arduous jobs, I prefer to work with others, which is more beneficial for us.
First of all, working with others could provide improvement to us. It is widely acknowledged that everyone is not perfect, so we still have shortages which we can enhance by learn from others. And individual’s strength is not enough to complete some jobs, so we could work with other to efficiently finish these jobs. For example, I had a complicated database project practice last summer vacation which includes inserting data in the database, designing the webpage to display the management system and ensuring the synchronous changes of data. In that I have to finish and submit the whole project rapidly in three days, which is implausible for one person to attain, I worked with some classmates and everyone only did their responsible part of the job after distribution. By continusouly learning and coding, we successfully developed our management system and submitted the project on time. At the meantime, I learned a lot of knowledge about network and creating scheme of database from others that is downright helpful to me. Consequently, working with others would strength one’s capability and efficiently finish the job simultaneously.
Furthermore, working with others could afford an apportunity to enlarge our social circle and practice our interpersonal skills. because we have to communicate with others about the jobs and relevant details, we could make enormous friends and learn many skills to handle interpersonal problems. For instance, my roommate john and I had a project about developing a simple software on mobile phone for the creative technological competition last semester. And two more students, lucy and ada, from other universities joined us. By studying about how to create a agile software, we stay up pretty late to code and test the data for one week and eventually developed the robust application on our mobile phones. During the development, because john is unfamiliar with the JavaScript to design the webpage, lucy and ada carefully taught some related knowledge and answer john’s questions at any time .Hence, by working with others, I enlarged my relationship with others and practiced my communication skills.
In sum, working with others is beneficial to us to efficiently complete jobs and extend our capability and social skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, so, still, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29487179487 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01100436259 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7952305525 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.470588235 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9411764706 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202001852319 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0812677469457 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0721839499721 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157635277645 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390544395326 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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