Do you agree or disagree that it is better to work for business owned by someone else than to work for the business of one’s own family.
Nowadays, more and more people are bustling to find a job and most of them employed by a company owned by someone else. In my opinion, I agree that it is better to work for business of one's own family.
First of all, working for business of one's own family always communicate with relatives in the company, which could be beneficial to efficiently complete the job. In that one people are more familar with his family member than strange colleagues, they can discuss and fix problems effectively. For example, my roommate's uncle John are working as a manager in an advertisement company for his family which is owned by my roommate's father and his wife and brothers are also in that company. they usually work together to analyze the requirements from customers and design the solution for some projects. Once they own different even contradictory ideas, they can peacefully discuss the problem and get an agreement. Then they could finish a project rapidly and effectively, which brings the company a lot of profits. On the contray, my uncle Mikkle entered a clothes company owned by someone else last year. because he was new to the company, other colleagues were not nice and hospitable to him which made him feel uncomfortable. this summer he quit this job due to colleagues' exclusion and uncomfortable working environment. Through obvious comparion, it is doubtless that working for business of one's own family could be beneficial to bring bargins because of efficient and effective teamwork.
Furthermore, working for business of one's own family often gender one's enthusiasim to work vigorously. Now that one work in a company for his family, whether the company could operate pretty well or not is considerably affect one's income, one would work arduously and try to commensurate all of his jobs to afford money to his company. For instance, one of my professor's brother jackie works in his father's food company. Result from his stringent father, his income is not enormous and completely depends on his behavior every month. So he have to behave better and better to work assiduously and pay attention to any potential problems carefully which would cause the company lose assets. In this way, jackies is widely accepted by his colleagues and praised by his father because his sterling skills of proactively handling problems in his works. Consequently, working in a company owned by one's own family could facilitate one's activeness to work hard.
In conclusion, working for business of one's own family could not only efficiently fix problems, but also engender one to be enthusiastic to his work to provide profits to his company.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, so, then, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04783599089 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79886875084 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492027334852 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0278340658 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.8 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.95 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39913336264 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159228579387 0.076458572812 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15174016584 0.0737576698707 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.313056345153 0.150856017488 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482037378886 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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