Do you agree or disagree that it is better to work for business owned by someone else than to work for the business of one’s own family.
Nowadays, working in business has been playing a significant role in our daily life. Although there is widely acknowledged belief that working for owned by someone else is perfect, some other people thinks that working for the business of one’s own family is better than working for owned by someone else. In my opinion, I prefer the second is better.
In the first place, no one can deny working for the business of one’s own family will get more salary than working for the business owned by someone else. In other words, the business owned by someone else will not have many profit to pay your high salary, but the business of one’s own family is not. Take my sister, Alice, as an example. She majored in the mathematics in the university, and she wanted to work in the business owned by someone else, because she thought she could become a leader in this business. So when she worked in the business, she worked harder than everyone in the business. She found that, however, not only she got a little salary but also will not become a leader. So, she decided working for the business of one’s own family. It is surprised that she got more salary than before when she worked in the first month. We can see that if she had worked for the business of one’s own family, she would have gotten a lot of salary. It is working for the business of one’s own family that Alice gets a lot of salary. So it is obvious that working for the business of one’s own family is better for us.
In the second place, you will have free time if you work for the business of one’s own family. In other words, if you working for the business owned by someone else, you will not have free time even not have weakened. Go back to the Alice’s example. She wanted to travel to the China, but what made she frustrated was that she not only had a little salary but also not have free time to travel other country. But when she worked for the business of one’s own family, she could apply for the 15-days to travel other country. We can see that it is because she works for the business of one’s own family that Alice has free time. If Alice had worked for the business of own family, she would have travelled a lot of countries and felt very happy. So it is clear that working for the business of own family will make us feel happy.
Granted, it is conceded that working for the business owned by someone else because you have a dream and you want to achieve your dream. However, while weighing the benefits brought by working for the business owned by someone else and working for the business of one’s own family, we can conclude that working for the business of one’s own family is worthwhile.
Although there are some people announced that it is better working for business owned by someone else than working for the business of one’s own family, I have to claim that working in the business of one’s own family is better because you will have a lot of salary and free time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...for the business owned by someone else. In other words, the business owned by some...
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Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun profit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many profits'.
Suggestion: many profits
...ess owned by someone else will not have many profit to pay your high salary, but the busine...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, while, in my opinion, in other words, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2494.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 548.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55109489051 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31498510907 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.299270072993 0.524837075471 57% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 809.1 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4162097454 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.76 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.92 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.669391227361 0.236089414692 284% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.305829414473 0.076458572812 400% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.210637768162 0.0737576698707 286% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.58186092671 0.150856017488 386% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0863020755207 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.35 8.01818996416 79% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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