Do you agree or disagree that it is better to work for business owned by someone else than to work for the business of one’s own family.
Nowadays, working in business has been playing a significant role in our daily life. Although there is widely acknowledged belief that working for owned by someone else is perfect, some other people thinks that working for the business of one’s own family is better than working for owned by someone else. In my opinion, I prefer the second is better.
In the first place, no one can deny working for the business of one’s own family will get more salary than working for the business owned by someone else. In other words, the business owned by someone else will not have a lot of profit to pay your high salary, but the business of one’s own family is not. Take my sister, Alice, as an example. She majored in the mathematics in the university, and she wanted to work in the business owned by someone else, because she thought she could become a leader in this business. So when she worked in the business, she worked harder than everyone in the business. She found that, however, not only she got a little salary but also will not become a leader. So, she decided working for the business of one’s own family. It is surprised that she got more salary than before when she worked in the first month. We can see that if she had worked for the business of one’s own family, she would have got a lot of salary.
In the second place, you will have free time if you work for the business of one’s own family. In other words, if you working for the business owned by someone else, you will not have free time even not have weakened. Go back to the Alice’s example. She wanted to travel to the China, but what made she frustrated was that she not only had a little salary but also not have free time to travel other country. But when she worked for the business of one’s own family, she could apply for the 15-days to travel other country. We can see that it is because she works for the business of one’s own family that Alice has free time.
Granted, it is conceded that working for the business owned by someone else because you have a dream and you want to achieve your dream. However, while weighing the benefits brought by working for the business owned by someone else and working for the business of one’s own family, we can conclude that working for the business of one’s own family is worthwhile.
Although there are some people announced that it is better working for business owned by someone else than working for the business of one’s own family, I have to claim that working in the business of one’s own family is better because you will have a lot of salary and free time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 161, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...for the business owned by someone else. In other words, the business owned by some...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, while, in my opinion, in other words, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58280922432 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32400693268 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.314465408805 0.524837075471 60% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 707.4 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6127484034 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.095238095 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7142857143 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.651739480589 0.236089414692 276% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.29169056047 0.076458572812 382% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.223108301185 0.0737576698707 302% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.556534599203 0.150856017488 369% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113450638055 0.0645574589148 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.48 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 61.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.5 Out of 30
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