People must be able to make their own decisions without relying on advice or input
from others.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether People should rely on others especially in the case of making a decision. As per Mr.Karvin, a professor of MS University, "the most difficult subject is a decision." It means it is very difficult to take a decision especially in case of financial matters. Personally, I disagree with this context. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following ways.
To begin with, the nature of all decisions are not the same. Some decisions are related to financial matters or some decisions are related to legal matters. In financial matters as well as legal matters people should require professional advice or input otherwise it is very difficult to make a good decision unless people know legal laws, financial laws very well. Let us look at the instance of my personal experience. My brother is an engineer, he can make their own decisions if it related to computer work. However, in case of financial matters as well as legal matters he is not sure about his own decisions. Thus, he always relies on a legal practitioner or financial practitioner. The reason is that finance and legal matters are not his cups of tea.
In addition, In managerial work, if people make their decisions in own way but it affects the whole organisation, then, in that case, people, should before making a decision, take a poll of particular decisions. Let us look at the metaphor of Board of directors of XYZ Company. Now as per amended Law, Board members should require to provide the details of property members hold. Here Company is responsible if Board members did not provide the details in time. Thus this shows that own decisions some time affect others also. Thus, in that case, people should consult before making the decisions.
In conclusion, although people should make their decision in their own way if such decisions are related to personal affairs. However, if decisions are related to business matters then people should consult professionals before making the final decisions
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus,
...rs did not provide the details in time. Thus this shows that own decisions some time...
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Suggestion: as well
...t own decisions some time affect others also. Thus, in that case, people should cons...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, then, thus, well, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00581395349 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7888014391 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46511627907 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.8267344802 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.1 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245734818774 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.078440388198 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082599352083 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167504658786 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746454671156 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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