Throughout history, people always should choose a career to do in professional life as a job. Based on their characteristics and emotions this job could be physical or mental, however, all the jobs are Repetitious. Nowadays jobs’ characteristics are more mental than physical. Some may hold the opinion than Taking leisure can be substituted by getting different from people’s work, but others have a negative attitude toward it. I personally support this statement based on two reasons which are presented below.
Without any shadow of doubt, the most important reason that comes to mind is different leisure make the brain work better. Neurons of the brain transform information better. Doing or learning new hobbies force the brain to make new nodes to contact other parts of their cerebral matter, thus the probability of some mental illnesses such as Parkinson and Alzheimer decreases. There is particular research which was done at the University of Tehran, Iran. In this research people attended in two groups, in first group participants should learn new physical activity and hobby, especially they should do they daily activities with their opposite hand and they could choose between hobbies they did not do in their daily life, but the second group just did hobbies and physical activities related to their work. Statistics of that empirical research shown that the neurons of the first group work better and make new nodes, in this special case twenty percent more than another group. In other words, their brain works better in aging.
The other reason that is equally important as the first one is by doing new activities their physical and mental parts of their body work better and people can make a stronger relationship. Also, the other effect of new activities is that people have a lot of fun time and concentration in their daily life. Consider a situation, my father is a middle-aged man which before he learns how to solve puzzles with my mother just do routine tasks after he arrived home, but when they could solve the very first of their puzzles, their relationship became stronger. They found something in common to speak and discuss. This was an example of a mental activity, the physical activity plays a similar role. According to my personal experience, the role of new mental and physical activity is much more than that people think, its relation to their routine and daily lifestyle, also there are a lot of other things that should be considered.
In can be concluded that it is true which in present days people have less leisure time to do what they want, moreover they bear a lot of pressure in their work hours, however, studies show that learning new activities make their life more pleasant and decrease the probability of being ill.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'holds'.
Suggestion: holds
...are more mental than physical. Some may hold the opinion than Taking leisure can be ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, thus, such as, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2328.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0064516129 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6138154963 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494623655914 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 712.8 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 85.6654253299 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.526315789 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4736842105 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313730568734 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0846963025005 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075561687134 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187591797882 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395082717204 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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