People should travel abroad to experience in various countries when they are younger rather than they are older.
Travel, part of life, has been valued and even triggers a heated discussion over which generation of people can benefit from traveling abroad. Traveling abroad when they are older, in some people’s views, is preferable. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that traveling abroad when they are young is superior, due to the contribution to their career development and health.
What must be prioritized is that compared to traveling abroad during older, making a trip abroad is beneficial to young people’s future career development, including learning more knowledge and coming across more different people. To begin with, we can never ignore that traveling abroad when people are at a young age helps people acquire a wide range of expertise. To be more concise, during a journey, youngers can absorb a wealth of knowledge like history, geography, and culture, and apply the knowledge into practice, thus facilitating career development; however, elders are incapable of acquiring knowledge when they travel abroad because their capability of absorbing knowledge deteriorates sharply. Moreover beneficial for youths to meet more diffident people is traveling abroad. In detail, during a trip, not only can youngers encounter people with different cultural backgrounds but also have deep communication with them, thus expanding personal networks, the key factors in career development; by contrast, those key factors do not play a crucial role for elders in career development.
What should be equally worth discussing is that going on a trip abroad when people are at a young age, rather than at an older age, is beneficial to people’s health, including physical health and mental health. First of all, never can we ignore that going on a trip abroad provides people with more opportunities to exercise. To be more specific, traveling abroad excludes people from a sedentary lifestyle, and enables them to have chances to stretch their cramped muscle; on the contrary, forcing elders to travel and exercise makes them feel tired out, even injuring their body. Furthermore, a stress-eliminating strategy for youths is going on a journey abroad. Specifically, traveling abroad can distract them from daily concerts and worries, and allow them to feel rested and recharged; on the other hand, traveling abroad when people are old increases mental pressure because they have to adapt to a new environment and adjust their diet.
Career development, the foundation for people’s lives, will be improved through traveling abroad when people are at a young age. Health, the requirement for people to live, will be improved through going on a journey abroad when people are young. Thus, only when people are younger can traveling abroad maximize its benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, first of all, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2352.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39449541284 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84350394537 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48623853211 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.8395544543 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.0 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.25 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359794823159 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156767566119 0.076458572812 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0892297801098 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264879306265 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550555493888 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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