People spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do - rather than doing things they should do.
Do you agree or disagree with the above statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers.
The author believes that people today squander more time on personal enjoyment, i,e doing things they like to do and don't concentrate on what they should. I disagree with the author claim for multiple reasons: most people have busy week and there is less time for personal enjoyment, some people set goals and understand what they should do and strive towards it, report on stress levels among people are increasing.
Firstly, many people work on weekdays for survival and daily bread. 2/7th of the week is the only average available time that a person can spend for himself where he can plan for doing things he like. Rest of the time, one spends on office or studying, which can be classified according to me as things they should do for survival. Although, proponents may argue that these people may not love what they are doing but I believe that number of people in the category is minimal. For example, most of people in my company love to work on the what they want. To support this argument, the retention rate in the company is very high, close to 100% ! .
Secondly, those people who set high goals work towards it without bothering about personal enjoyment. For example, recently, I set a goal on myself to become fit. I worked hard, every evening, in gym for fitness. Although, it was tiring, demanding and I personally did not like it, I did not stop. I continued to purse because I saw my end goal and I knew what and why I should pursue. Like me, there are several others who set goals and are ready to sacrifice their personal enjoyment to achieve it. For example, entrepreneur who work hard to start a company or a researcher who works day and night for his thesis know what they want to do and do not spend time on personal enjoyment.
Thirdly, statistically speaking, report on number of people complaining about stress have increased. If people spend more time on personal enjoyment, i.e doing things they like to do, there should have been no increase in number of people complaining on stress. In fact, since people enjoy the most, number should have decreased. This clearly casts doubt on author's claim.
Although proponents of the claim may mention that accessibility for personal enjoyment has become easy like clubs or parties but i believe that not all can afford it. In fact only few people are capable of affording going to clubs or parties.
To conclude, for the reasons mentioned in the paragraph two, three and four, I personally disagree with the claim. Further, I believe only few people who are directionless are currently squandering their time and not all.
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'for example', 'in fact']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.201960784314 0.229887763892 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.194117647059 0.158761421928 122% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0647058823529 0.0866891130778 75% => OK
Adverbs: 0.043137254902 0.046263068375 93% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0725490196078 0.0685040099705 106% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123529411765 0.118717715034 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0411764705882 0.0351676179071 117% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.4970717777 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0274509803922 0.0309702414327 89% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0549019607843 0.0887237588012 62% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0254901960784 0.0209618222197 122% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0274509803922 0.0139019557991 197% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2611.0 2387.08602151 109% => OK
No of words: 454.0 408.028673835 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75110132159 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.323788546256 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.215859030837 0.251872472559 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.160792951542 0.174417080927 92% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0991189427313 0.112833075102 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4970717777 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480176211454 0.524397521467 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.0250482673 59.2087087015 91% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.9166666667 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3603447224 48.84282405 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.791666667 120.699889404 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 20.5533526081 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 40.5025697504 45.7405998639 89% => OK
Elegance: 1.1835443038 1.45489161554 81% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391203226729 0.300154397459 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.110707541662 0.103427244359 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.102677997958 0.0752933317313 136% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.497295553899 0.497263757937 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.196982867686 0.151897553556 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12607514925 0.114077575197 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111760487366 0.0781384742642 143% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.219237257885 0.336927656856 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0876261070987 0.067059652881 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235166547503 0.210909579961 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0983433891339 0.0618886996521 159% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.86379928315 155% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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