People spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do - rather than doing things they should do.Do you agree or disagree with the above statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers.

There are two kinds of things available for people to do, namely, the things people enjoy to do and the things people should do. When it comes to which one takes up most of the time a person has nowadays, people have different standpoints. Personally speaking, I feel that people don't spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things, that is, they spend most of their time on things they are obliged to do.

There is no denying that people today are entitled to do what they enjoy, like travelling, reading books and watching movies. For example, one of my friend had a nationwide trip during his final year at the university and he quite enjoyed it. However, is it possible for people to have do things they like no matter when they have the desire? As for me, the answer is absolutely negative for two reasons elaborated below.

In the first place, students are required to learn numerous knowledge and not encouraged to participate in other extracurricular activities, in which they can enjoy themselves. It is well acknowledged that no matter what stage a student is currently in, quantities of courses are made compulsory for them to master, leading to the fact that a large proportion of students are under stress and tension as well as have no time to do anything else, even including what they have passion to. Take my little sister, a middle school student as an example. In her curriculum, there are various syllabuses, like Physics, Biology, Geography and so on. To perform well, she has to spend a tremendous amount of time and energy to study them for the reason that none of these subjects are trivial for her. However, getting outstanding marks cannot make her happy and what she really keens is singing. Unfortunately, she has no time to practice singing on account of most time are occupied by school work.

In addition, employees also need to do things they do not like but should do. A job for a person is imperative because it allows the person has stable incomes to live. To avoid be fired, one need to strive to work no matter whether he or she likes it or not. For example, my uncle is a programmer working on a small Information Technology company. What he does every day is to code and to test the code whether it is correct or not, which is exceedingly boring for him. He cannot playing guitar, his favourite enjoyment, due to endless assignment.

In conclusion, students and workers cannot spend time on personal enjoyment-doing things.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy doing'.
Suggestion: enjoy doing
...people to do, namely, the things people enjoy to do and the things people should do. When i...
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Line 1, column 281, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...Personally speaking, I feel that people dont spend too much time on personal enjoyme...
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Line 3, column 287, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...ever, is it possible for people to have do things they like no matter when they ha...
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Line 5, column 829, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... her. However, getting outstanding marks cannot make her happy and what she reall...
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Line 7, column 372, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'be'?
Suggestion: be
...hnology company. What he does every day is to code and to test the code whether it...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, so, well, as for, as to, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, of course, as well as, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74768518519 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69637574765 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523148148148 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4745916272 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391012922806 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124129513805 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167928406353 0.0737576698707 228% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264036556435 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141114166967 0.0645574589148 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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