Every person in his or her life span faces quite a few challenging situations in which they have to assertively decide about their future. One of these decisions has to do with how they spend their time and energy on developing their skills. Some people believe they should stay focused on one skill to become successful, while others think otherwise. I, personally, subscribe to the former notion since they can become professional and serve their society in an excellent fashion.
First, nowadays, in this modern era which is progressing gallopingly, jobs have become specialized, thus requiring everyone to dedicate themselves to gain experience in only one field. On the contrary, in the past few centuries, people's needs were simple and they can answer their wants through their imperfect abilities on their own. Today, however, they have to broaden their knowledge to be considered an expert and fulfill others' complicated desires. Additionally, one cannot survive in such a competitive world by developing various skills, but rather he or she should deepen their knowledge to earn enough money to live a prosperous life.
Humans are sociable beings and their success must be profitable not only for themselves but also for their society. In an imaginary world, if one has inefficiently numerous skills, there would have been no qualified specialist to ask for help in critical, desperate situations. Hence, society cannot properly overcome the difficulty when they face adversity. Furthermore, the cost of possessing one specific skill is much less than learning plentiful ones, in that deep learning only happens when one makes mistakes fearlessly, which is truly extravagant. Thus, I am of the opinion that the government should take effective measures to pave the way for every citizen to become an experienced specialist in a major of which they are fond.
With all the aforementioned reasons taken into account, it stands to reason that being single-minded and focused in a certain major is more advantageous since one can lead fruitful life and benefits his or her society with less cost. Who, in their right mind, can consider a master of none a successful person?
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an excellent fashion" with adverb for "excellent"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...me professional and serve their society in an excellent fashion. First, nowadays, in this modern era...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, thus, while, as to, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1836.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21590909091 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83061772308 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622159090909 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2484902442 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.4 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4666666667 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170038911888 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542451639381 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591290809013 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980659378805 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0157800596623 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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