Playing sports teaches people more important lessons about life.
Physical activities have always played an essential role in people's lives. In fact, they have several benefits that can be useful in the long run for people. Some experts believe that people can learn essential matters during their lifetime from different sources that physical activities cannot be considered as the most important one. On the other hand, some others, including me have an opposite viewpoint. I firmly believe that people will be able to learn substantial lessons by playing sports rather than any other activity. In what follows, the most outstanding reasons will be pinpointed to clarify the importance of playing sports for teaching people how they behave properly.
First and foremost, playing sports leads people to be responsible in their lives. Nobody can ignore the paramount importance of having the sense of responsibility for people. During playing sports they have to be aware of the consequences of their actions. Therefore, it will have impressive results on their behavior in societies in various circumstances. For instance, my little brother as a mechanical engineering student has always been one of the well-known students in playing sports at the University of Tehran. However his main major did not have any relation to physical activities, his contribution to playing sports made valuable opportunities for him to learn how to be responsible for his tasks at the final stages. After a while, one of his friends tried to participate alongside him to learn the basic concepts of this issue. As a result, his friend had a remarkable performance in his educational matters. As you can see, playing sports learned them one of the main characteristics that can be useful for everyone during the lifetime.
A furthermore significant point is that playing sports helps people to learn how they should behave to have the healthy lifestyle. Such activities stick in their mind to strengthen their abilities and good habits in their lives. Let's consider my own personal experience as an example. I had been working as the full-time dentist for three years before I changed my daily programs. I had to work 10 hours a day and I did not have any free time to allocate to other activities. Once I decided to reduce my working hours, I participated a gym club to experience some physical activities with my friends. I learned there how can I manage my activities to have better conditions mentally. After a while, I felt better and It had a profound effect on my life. In fact, had I participated in sports club earlier, I would have experienced nice feelings with a proper lifestyle.
In brief, by taking into account all the aforementioned reasons, it seems that the mentioned assertion that playing sports teaches people remarkable lessons is a rational one. Not only does it help them to be responsible for their works, but also people learn how to strengthen good habits for having healthy lifestyle during the lifetime. Therefore, it is highly recommended for both people and governments to pay special attention to physical activities to gain fantastic outcomes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, in brief, in fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2596.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10019646365 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8930885776 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481335952849 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 806.4 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7292313475 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1481481481 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8518518519 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221550714877 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675526440189 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778049062639 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154012287025 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585244989966 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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