Question: Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Question: Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

As everything in life is like a coin that has two different sides, people must weigh the pros and cons before jumping to conclusions. Nevertheless, some may adamantly believe that encouraging kids to allocate most of their time to play games, others will think that such actions will have negative impacts as well. This essay will elaborate both views.
To start with, the majority of individuals would agree with the notion that playing games can be beneficial, especially in their childhood. First and foremost, in order to stay physically and mentally fit, children are usually advised to do a variety of physical activities on a regular basis. According to a recent study published in the New England Journal of medicine in 2018, children who spend more than ten hours weekly exercising either indoor or outdoor tend to grow faster and become less vulnerable to acquiring diseases. This is because the youngsters playing games like running and jumping will have a stronger immune system, and will gain few centimeters more than their peers who spend less time practicing. In addition to staying healthy and in a good shape, playing sports early can shape one`s future. In other words, most of the famous athletes nowadays started practicing sports at the age of six which allow them to become professionals. For instance, Rafael Nadal, the famous tennis champion, began his journey in the sports world earlier as six years old, he played different games until he realized that tennis is his passion. If he didn`t start earlier, he wouldn`t have become the hero we know today.

On the other hand, exercising too much can sometimes be detrimental. To begin with, by spending most of their time playing, children will not have sufficient period for studying. Consequently, children who study less tend to get lower grades in school, which will affect their performance and their overall grading as well. Moreover, injuries incidences are likely to be higher among over-active kids. Take my brother as an example, he suffered from multiple fractures during his boyhood while doing Karate. As a result, his absence during elementary school increased significantly and could not compensate what he missed and ended up with very low grades. Long story short, it is advisable to always balance between practicing and relaxing in order to avoid any harms.

In conclusion, however playing sports longer periods improves the quality of life and the career pathway of youngsters, failure to manage between practicing and resting could lead to severe hazards such as bad performance in school and may accidently increase the risk of injuries.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1065, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...his journey in the sports world earlier as six years old, he played different game...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words, to begin with, to start with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2228.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18139534884 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67975604905 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.618604651163 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7725504892 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.263157895 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6315789474 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8947368421 5.45110844103 200% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102593089876 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0305116280816 0.076458572812 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360415526392 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0594064757672 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023968664341 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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