Some young children spend a great amount of their time practicing sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on the benefit of sport for young children. Personally, I think there are many advantages and disadvantages for doing exercise at this age.
To begin with, one of the critical benefits of practicing sport for teens is being in good health. Doing regular exercise allows our body to burn more calories and stay in good shape. There are many studies say that the main reason behind obesity in most children is the unfavorable lifestyle such as sitting a long time in front of the TV and not practicing any kind of exercise. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was eight years old, my weight was 200 pounds. I had very severe obesity because I was spending most of my time playing video games at home. Moreover, I did not practice sport for almost three years because whenever I started doing that my obesity held me back. I had short breathing and I used to feel tired with any activity that required physical movement. Therefore, I did not have a healthy shape at all. Furthermore, avoiding practicing any kind of sport allow teens to be vulnerable to many critical diseases such as heart failure and diabetes. These invasive diseases can destroy children life and prevent them from enjoying their future because they have to adapt themselves to new life habit by taking some medications and avoid eating much food. Indeed, practicing sport has many health benefits for most young children.
On the other hand, practicing sport for a long time at this age might prevent children to focus on their study. They get distracted from studying their daily homework. For instance, my nephew Mohammed had the same experience. When he was at elementary school he used to spend most of his time playing basketball in the neighborhood’s gym. He used to come home late and tired, so he did not do his homework at all. As a result, he failed to succeed in school and he used to get very low grades. Obviously, practicing sport for a long time prevents children from succeeding in their education.
In conclusion, there are several advantages and disadvantages of spending much time practicing sport for teens. Personally, I recommend most young kids to practice sport to be in a healthy shape while they are focusing on their study classes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80653266332 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69600799884 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515075376884 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0437851095 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1739130435 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3043478261 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52173913043 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216912543427 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669062232567 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543657443074 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151442554491 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0228605550352 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.32 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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