Some people think that earning a high salary is the most important thing about a job. Other people think that doing enjoyable work is more important, even if the job does not pay well. Which is more important to you: work that pays well or work that is enjoyable? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on what is the most important aspect in any job. While some people think that work environment and happiness are the most significant part in any career, I hold the opposite view. I believe that today having a high salary is the most essential element in any job.
To begin with, when people receive high salary in their job, they will be more passionate and motivated to work hard. As everyone knows, money is the real motivation for most people around the world. Whenever someone has more money he/she will be encouraged to finish any tasks. For example, in 2002, Microsoft Company had an issue with employee’s productivity. At that time, the company did not make a huge profit because most employees were frustrated by the work environment. Therefore, they did not work hard; and most of the time they came late to the company. Then, the CEO of the company decided to increase the salary for all employees with 50%. It was a huge decision because it cost the company a lot of money. However, the productivity in the work increased dramatically. Everyone was motivated to finish his job on time and with accurate method. As a result, in 2004, Microsoft company reached the peak profit and it became the first popular computer company in the world. Obviously, the salary made a huge motivation on employee’s performance.
Adding to the previous point, when people have high salary, they will live a convenient live. They can help their family to succeed in different life purposes. For instance, parents can help their children to get an excellent education by having that money. They can send them abroad and let them study in top universities around the world. Furthermore, people can build their own house when they receive high salary. Also, they can enjoy their life by travelling and exploring the world nature. Indeed, people will get happiness and enjoy their life when they earn a high salary in their work.
In conclusion, I urge people to accept job with high salary. This is because they will be more motivated to work and they will live a convenient lifestyle.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whenever” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85245901639 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61954469189 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489071038251 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.8920544733 48.9658058833 39% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.0 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23154879985 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710389559977 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658366234231 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161845467982 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558139519143 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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