Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on the best way that people might enjoy their time when they are working. While some people believe that it is better for employees to work five days a week for shorter hours, I hold the opposite view. I think people will enjoy more when they work three days a week for long hours.
To begin with, working only three days a week allows employees to spend more time with their family. They will be able to strengthen the family relationship. For example, when I worked as a pharmacist in King Fisal hospital, I had only two days off. Therefore, I did not have enough time to spend with my kinds and my wife. Later on, my family relationship became fragile and my wife asked me to divorce her because she did not have enough time to stay with me. On the other hand, my brother Aymen has very strong family relationship because he works only three days a week. As a result, he spends the four free days with his kids and his wife.
In addition to strengthen the family relationship, working less days with extra hours allows people to travel and have fun. Employees will have four days off to travel to different places and refresh themselves. For example, Bill Gates the manager of Microsoft Company has more than four days off a week. He used to travel sometime to Dubai and other time to Paris in order to refresh his mind and come back to work with clean mindset. However, when people work more days a week, they would not have enough time to travel around the world and refresh themselves.
Last but not least, having more days off allows employees to decrease the level of work stress in their body. In work atmosphere, the percentage of stress hormones raise and could have negative impact on people health. For instance, when Barack Obama nominated to become the president of United states, he was at very good health. Unfortunately, his health deteriorated because work pressure within only several months. His wife talked to the media said that he worked almost everyday and did not give himself days off.
In sum, I strongly believe that working three days a week is more enjoyable than five days a week.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 60, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun days is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ngthen the family relationship, working less days with extra hours allows people to ...
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Line 7, column 477, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...to the media said that he worked almost everyday and did not give himself days off. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1791.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61597938144 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30481406434 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481958762887 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.4828941074 48.9658058833 44% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.2857142857 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4761904762 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.346449975007 0.236089414692 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126840693307 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918522462528 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240981721713 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618474747826 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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