If you were the president of the United State, which of the followingwould you choose to do, and explain why. 1) build more schools,2) provide more funding for public transportation3) create more public parks.

Essay topics:

If you were the president of the United State, which of the following
would you choose to do, and explain why.

1) build more schools,
2) provide more funding for public transportation
3) create more public parks.

Nowadays, education is considered to be an essential element in people’s lives. Most countries tend to improve their education system in order to get many benefits. Personally, If I were the president of the United States, I would build more schools in the country.
To begin with, building more schools will help many citizens to get educated. Today, there are lack of schools in the United States because of the high demand on schools especially after the government opened the gate for refugees and immigrants to settle in the country. These people need to educate their kids in American schools, so this will force the country to build more schools in order to meet the high demand. For example, I met last year with a Syrian person who entered the United State in 2017. He was complaining about acceptance process in elementary schools. Most schools have limited number of students to accept; they only accept ninety students in fourth grade. However, students who applied in the same school exceeded 400 students. Therefore, he can not find spot in the school to his daughter. Apparently. If the president of the United States built more schools for people, this would solve the problem for this Syrian guy.
Adding to the previous point, building more schools will help the country to flourish their economic revenues. The high tuition fees at many universities will generate a lot of money to the country. Currently, many students come to the United State in order to continue their education. Therefore, they tend to pay high fees to get their degrees. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I came to the United State, I paid fifty thousand dollars for the first year at University of San Diego in Pharmacy program. Thus, imagine the amount of student who come to the United States and pay the same amount. It would add a lot of money to the country. Obviously, the country will generate billion of dollar by building many schools and take high fees.
In conclusion, I encourage most presidents to take care of their educational system through building many schools. This is because it will open many spots for students, and it will help the country to increase their revenue.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a billion
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Suggestion:
... the country to increase their revenue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88829787234 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54185760092 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4516216925 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.9130434783 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.347826087 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08695652174 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164739437548 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534476023946 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635703134482 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108551333185 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347138734497 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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