Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Having a job is considered to be an important element in people’s lives. people tend to put all their effort in order to become successful in their career. Some of them study persistently at school to achieve this dream. However, I think people can succeed in their future job if they communicate well with others. I feel this way for a couple of reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, when young people have the ability to relate well to others, they can easily get promoted at work. Whenever someone knows how to talk and convince others to become in his/her sides, he would make his life easy. For example, I know my friend Ahmed since I was at university. He used to chat with everyone in the faculty such as professors and many students. He became very popular at that time because his ability to relate well to people. After he graduated and started his career working in Aramco company, he applied the same skill in his work field. Therefor, he got his first promotion within only three months. Furthermore, he became the head manager of his department within one year from his first day. Ironically, most of his friends at work have more degrees than him
Adding to the previous point, networking allows people to improve their way dealing with others. When people talk more with each other and make relationship, they can understand different kinds of personalities. For instance, again, my friend Ahmed knew about people attitude whenever he talks with someone. He knows how to deal with each personal issue such as people who have tamper mood. Thus, he was able to overcome all the personal problems that happened at his work. This was a great factor to make his succeed in his career life.
In conclusion, I encourage young adults to improve their ability to relate well to people in order to succeed in their future career. This is not only because this skill allows them to get promoted in short time, but also, it allows them to broaden their communication knowledge.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...portant element in people's lives. people tend to put all their effort in order t...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'tampered'.
Suggestion: tampered
... personal issue such as people who have tamper mood. Thus, he was able to overcome all...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in short, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47362116196 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539772727273 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.1125980039 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.619047619 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7619047619 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.19047619048 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165698090014 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568077093645 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0484195367801 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112203453379 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0476735944365 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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