"Religion should be taught in public schools”. Discuss this statement giving reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Schools have had the responsibility of train their students in no less than a perfect and many of them have their own methodology to do so, some try to teach religion while some try to teach innovation, some try to teach culture while some teach modernity. Personally, I believe that public schools should not spend their time and effort in teaching religion. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will be explaining in the following essay.
First of all, religions has always divided and in most of the cases has affected the unity among people. There might be students who will be having some different belief and they will, most probably not agree with the study of religion taught inside class, so this will certainly bring out differences among children. People belonging from varied community are bound to have dissimilar thoughts and beliefs. One religion might teach some different way pf perceiving surroundings and human beings, while some other will have their own way. Consequently, this has always affected the overall growth of the nation and have paved the path of destruction and violence. For instance, India has people from different religions, caste, creed, communities etc. which are presently living in a peaceful state. But in the seventeenth and eighteenth century this country had to suffer a lot due to this diversity. Europeans like Britishers, Portuguese etc were able to control this country because all the kingdoms of varied religions were constantly fighting with each other, due to this they exploited India and satisfied their own demands. In the year 1947, India lost major part of its land as Pakistan got seperated from it and the reason behind this was also, religion differences. If different religions would not have existed, India would have been in a much better state. And this same impact can be found in classrooms of schools, who wish to teach religion.
Secondly, schools were created to impart education to children and they should not divert away from their main agenda. Teaching religion is not a part of academics and will never help students in job opportunities or in career. Instead of this, some classes could be organized related to some physical activity or meditation, which will actually be very beneficial for students. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was in my middle school, we had to take one subject, not related to academics as a part of art education. The subjects were yoga, skating, religion education etc. I chose yoga and my friend chose religion education. Later on, I went to many competitions related to yoga, which added weight to my resume and became popular in school. While there were no competitions organised for religion studies, my friend felt bored in that class, and after some months this subject was omitted from Art education.
In conclusion, I strongly disagree that college should include the study regarding religion in their course for students. This is because it will not give birth to differences of beliefs and thoughts among children and because, schools were supposed to impart knowledge to students that can help them in future.
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...nowledge to students that can help them in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2638.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 525.0 407.700716846 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02476190476 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6399848828 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.500952380952 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 803.7 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.7900833434 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.461538462 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1923076923 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19230769231 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215782294697 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636265411627 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429599443574 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13358136143 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014206306759 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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