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In today's progressive and sophisticated world, there are a rich diversity of resources that individuals can learn new things, such as the Internet, their peers, teachers, parents, books, and so on. In this regard, many people believe that an individual can learn things and concepts better from their peers than those people who are at a higher level. By contrast, many others hold the opposite view, claiming that any person can learn less from his or her peers but more from people at higher level. I, personally, concur with the latter group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, people, like teachers or instructors, are more knowledgeable compared to peers, and individuals can learn more from them. To be more specific, if a person wants to learn something and improve his or her knowledge in a particular area, he or she has to interact with people who have that knowledge, in other words, a person who is at higher level in terms of knowledge related to that particular field. For instance, if students want to learn lessons or gain information about their course materials, they might learn minor points from their peers since they are not expertise in any area of knowledge. In contrast, when they ask their educators, since these people are more well-educated and expertise in their own field of study and research, teachers can better educate those students. Thus, through communication and interaction with their teachers, who are at higher level than students, these students can learn and benefit more.
Secondly, individuals can learn more things from people at a higher level since these people have more skill and ability of teaching and educating things. In fact, although peers might have done some research in some area, they are less likely to be able to teach and convey information and matters to others. Nonetheless, those who are at a higher level of a person have more experience and skill for teaching that person. For example, if I want to learn something my workplace about my job, since senior or boss manager are more well-equipped and skillful in their career compared to my colleagues, they can better teach me. As I hired in a company last year, I got into a trouble about how to simulate the cooling load of a building as my project. Back then, my co-worker was a new worker like me, and although he proposed me some suggestions, none of them worked out. Eventually, my senior manager came to me and solved the problem easily. Thus, I found out he was highly skillful in that simulation and was so highly well-round and had a lot of hands-on experience that enabled him to help and solve my issues quickly.
To conclude, individuals can lean more and better from people at higher level. Not only are they more knowledgeable than peers, but they also have more skill and experience in different fields.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 532, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to minor'
Suggestion: to minor
...heir course materials, they might learn minor points from their peers since they are ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in contrast, in fact, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2442.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93333333333 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65061283348 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.5200497122 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.526315789 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0526315789 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84210526316 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0110222352989 0.236089414692 5% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00479419331174 0.076458572812 6% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0203400396063 0.0737576698707 28% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00955383223189 0.150856017488 6% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165477228326 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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