Should children be allowed to watch tv advertisements?
these days advertising companies use wide variety of strategic methods in order to attract costumers to follow what they want and eventually make these people adapt their intrest based on their own ideas.Some of the costumers that are targeted to follow the comercials, are the children who begin to connect themselves with the outside environment. As these kids learn to respond to the things around them they actually learn to modify their behavior in certain ways.What I believe that these programs should be banned while some of these special modifications are brought by the advertising programs through television that eventually make these kids enjoy watching them and not the parents company, they also have a critical change in their language development, and they are likely to consume more the products they watch thorought advertisements.
First of all, these kids do not know how to spend their time healthily. In other words, they might waste their time watching shows that are not as socially useful as the fact they could have conversation and spend time with their parents. For example, I have two nephews who are identical twins. one of them always likes to watch the tv shows and spend a lot of his time whatching tv. Another one likes to be with his mother and spend time speaking and learning things around house.Now , it is easy to judge which have better perception of the world around them.The one who has a fixation on watching tv do have a hard time learning things and he does not know how goes through the day and vise versa.
Secondly, when babies in these ages watch tv instead of interacting with others, their language development would dramatically decrease. children at this period should interact with their parents and spend more time with them. while most parents automatically tune into their language and can help them learn more and feel more confident with their language learning. For instance, when my sister grew up watching tv and advertising products that are targeted to her meaning she liked them a lot. she would hardlyever spend her time talking to us. As a result, she learned to talk with one year delay.
Thirdly, recent studies show that more and more children have obisity due to their diets that are based on the tv comercials. In fact, snacks and chips and pizzas are the maing subjects of these comercials that make the kids who love tv more fat. For example, my friend who never watched tv since he was a kid made him have a thin body. Because, he does not lilke any kind of snacks so now he does not have obisity.
In conclusio, these advertisements should be stopped in oder to keep the children more healthy and enjoy their families and finally a better life for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, for example, for instance, in fact, kind of, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2284.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85957446809 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49338448811 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491489361702 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 116.308617241 48.9658058833 238% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 126.888888889 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1111111111 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27777777778 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213772794143 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736341784258 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662445183476 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140266612485 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040166250021 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 10.002688172 290% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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