whether should children use electronic product for study or not
Among all the perspectives that were discussed so far concerning whether we should use electronic products, I am totally agree about children should utilize the electronic device as earlier as possible. Reasons would be illustrated as follows.
I remembered when I was a kid, smartphone are not easily to find until high school. it is not common to see the students in our class who owns the smartphone or any other electronic devices. Things changed though after the boom of technology development. While the school are trying to keep pace with the modern techiniques, our future generation also need to have advanced objects which are beneficiary to their study. Thus, it's of vital significance that students nowadays should have their own electronic products.
There is a transmission from my high school year to my university life. The biggest challenge I face is I can't get used to the electronic text. I can't focused when I'm looking at the E-books; I can't write when I have to hand in the Microwords towards my paper; Most severly, I can't think when I have to do the test online. These issues bothered me a lot and I positively thought that everything is gonna be fine after graduation. However, as we know, electronic device involved more during our career. Especially when I came to an technology company afterwards. Due to lack of computer training in my growth period, it's not easy for me to catch up with the function of lately invention. Hence if the students keep in touch with the electronic products earlier, they will gain more satisfication and less pain in the latter life of study and career.
Newly product also have advantages that old teaching method don't. when many school and workplace have to shut down on account of the pendamic, obviously, the good points of computer and new software show naturally. Link people from distance in video camera, by using this kind of software, teachers can teach students online and leaders could hold a meeting online no matter how far the person are. In fact, it would be totally different if we only remain the traditional face-to-face way of learning and teaching, kids could be stay at home with little studying and wait for the school open after the pendamic, who would certainly not gain any progress during such long period.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
...d use electronic products, I am totally agree about children should utilize the elect...
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Line 1, column 191, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...tilize the electronic device as earlier as possible. Reasons would be illustrated ...
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Line 2, column 84, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...e not easily to find until high school. it is not common to see the students in ou...
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Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...life. The biggest challenge I face is I cant get used to the electronic text. I cant...
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Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...cant get used to the electronic text. I cant focused when Im looking at the E-books;...
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Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...he electronic text. I cant focused when Im looking at the E-books; I cant write wh...
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Line 3, column 193, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...cused when Im looking at the E-books; I cant write when I have to hand in the Microw...
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Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...words towards my paper; Most severly, I cant think when I have to do the test online...
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Line 3, column 527, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...g our career. Especially when I came to an technology company afterwards. Due to l...
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Line 3, column 686, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... with the function of lately invention. Hence if the students keep in touch with the ...
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Line 4, column 61, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ave advantages that old teaching method dont. when many school and workplace have to...
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Line 4, column 67, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...vantages that old teaching method dont. when many school and workplace have to shut ...
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Line 4, column 72, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun school seems to be countable; consider using: 'many schools'.
Suggestion: many schools
...ges that old teaching method dont. when many school and workplace have to shut down on acco...
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Line 4, column 221, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Link) must be used with a third-person verb: 'peoples'.
Suggestion: peoples
...r and new software show naturally. Link people from distance in video camera, by using...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, look, so, thus, while, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87468030691 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70014233644 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611253196931 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4904241409 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.315789474 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5789473684 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.5376344086 253% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227329101868 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541152116725 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768496588979 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137220336139 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859035655113 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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