Should countries intervene in a genocides in another country where a lot of civilians might be killed? Explain your answer
Genocide is one of the disastrous event that can ever happen to a nation. Not only does it lead to the loss of lives of many people including young ones and women, it also leads to the decimation of a lot of material possession that one has spent several years to acquire. Today many are of the idea that a country that is able to help shouldn’t intervene in another country where genocide would take place because they feel this might escalate the toll of event. In my own view I think a country who can help, should readily offer a helping hand to a country where genocide might lead to the death of the civilians for two important reasons which I’ll discuss in this essay.
The main reason is that it restores peace back to the nation. A country who wants to intervene would likely send its military to this country where such events want to take place. Not only that they would provide camps for people who might be affected and secure such camps so as to keep the people safe before the problem is totally solved. For example, my country Nigeria sent troops of soldier to Mali in 1989 when the country is going through a rough time because of deliberate mass killing of civilians of a particular tribe. The soldiers were able to provide foods for the people who were affected by this genocide attempt. Not only that the soldiers were able to provide camps where these people who were affected by this were properly secured and taken care of. The soldiers armed such places so as to prevent the attack of such camps. In no time the soldiers were able to negotiate for peace to reign back in the nation of Mali. This led to the freedom of this affected political stratum and they were able to live in peace with other citizens of the country. As you can see the intervention of the military group helped to restore peace and reduce the casualties that must have come from the that genocide.
Another reason is that this helps to preserve the economy of such country and other countries. A Country where such activities is taking place would suffer from economic hardship because people of such land would not be able to go about their day to day activities and work would be affected. Not only that countries that benefit from the produce of such countries would also suffer because economic activities would shut down and most likely the ports would cease to work where export activities should have taken place. For instance, few weeks of the killings in Mali, this led to reduction in the production of farm produce in no time many people in Mali started to feel the heat of the event and there is starvation in the land because the country couldn’t produce their farm produce. Similarly, neighboring country like Ghana also suffered from this because they depend on the cocoa produced by Mali to produce their own beverages which they export to other countries. But because of the intervention of the military troop from Nigeria, activities were immediately resumed and things went back to normal. This experience taught me the importance of a country intervening in another country where genocide is about to take place.
In sum, it can be clearly seen that it is important for a country to intervene in genocide threat of a country. Not only does it restore peace back to the affected nation, it also helps preserve the economy. I’ll advise every nation to be of helping hand when such wants to happen in future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...might be affected and secure such camps so as to keep the people safe before the problem...
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...care of. The soldiers armed such places so as to prevent the attack of such camps. In no...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... helping hand when such wants to happen in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, similarly, so, as to, for example, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 29.0 11.0286738351 263% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 96.0 52.1666666667 184% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2844.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 609.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66995073892 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96768813016 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37083292027 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.395730706076 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 909.9 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.0548810784 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.5 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.375 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.79166666667 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277322013224 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886993408596 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970926123522 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189843711647 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646513479106 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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