Should parents give money to their children for studying?
There is no secret that nowadays, with increase of wisdom, that education is getting more and more valuable in people's lives. There are many encouragements which leads people to learn more new things. Even when they are too young, they are mostly aware of education’s importance. In this way, parents who are most concerned about the education of their children, define some encouragement to push their children to get higher grade in school. However, I hold a different attitude toward this issue. In what follows, I will elaborate my perspective.
One of the most important fact to be mentioned is that making children aware of the value of education can be more efficient in their lives. All the defined temporary encouragements by parents, teachers or other people will lose their effect very soon and what lasts is only the love of knowledge which keeps children interested in studying. To illustrate this, let me come up with an example. My sister was not enthusiasm enough to study mathematics in school and thus my mother promised her to pay her money if she could get a good grade in school. In the end of that semester she could get a good score and my mother paid that money to her. But under the same circumstance, she was not interested in study in the next semester, even though my mother told her that she would pay money to her again. She grew up later and became fascinated about becoming an engineer in the future and she recognized how mathematic can be important in her future job. So she started studying mathematic in a serious way from then.
Another equally important fact is that being paid for getting higher score can lead children to cheat in their exams and getting that grade in an inappropriate way. Since these kind of encouragements are usually defined for those students who are not really enthusiasm about studying, they would find it easier to cheat on exam instead of study for long hours. The money that they are supposed to be given to them is not strong enough to persuade them for study more and it seems many time easier to answer some of those exam’s question by looking at other student exam paper. I recall once one of my classmate who had cheated on the exam, was punished by our teacher in the primary school and when our teacher asked her “why did you do that?” She answered I was supposed to get money from my father for high grade in this exam.
All in all, although sometimes these being rewarded for higher grade can be a kind of motivation for children to study more, its disadvantages still outweigh its benefits. Due to the fact that in this way children never understand the education’s importance in their future jobs and besides it can lead them to get that score in an immoral way.
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...t in their exams and getting that grade in an inappropriate way. Since these kind of encouragements are...
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...ides it can lead them to get that score in an immoral way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, look, really, so, still, then, thus, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2268.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56115567003 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 714.6 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8662891645 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.4 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222088409187 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649766251048 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598446477821 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143226654771 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281898865385 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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