Should scientific and non-scientific activities at universities receive equal fund?
Today most of people go to colleges and universities to prepare themselves for their future. Usually there are two different types of activities that are available in a college or a university: scientific activities such as studying, teaching and etc. and non-scientific activities such as social activities and sports. To me, these activities are of the same importance and should receive equal fund. There are a lot of reasons for this choice and I would like to put them in the following order.
To begin with, we should consider the basic fact that " a healthy mind is in a healthy body". There are a lot of studies that prove the critical relation between brain function and psychological condition of a person. A study by MIT university proved that if a person engages in social activities or sports will perform twenty one percent better than a person who does not. So this outcome of research shows us how important it is for universities and colleges to allocate sufficient and equal fund to both scientific related activities such as libraries and non-scientific activities such as sports.
Furthermore, we should be aware that the main aim of universities and colleges are not only to flourish scientific talents but also to burgeon all talent in variety of field. In order to do that these places need every kind of amenities to help a talented person in swimming such as a pool as much as facilities for scientific talents. By performing a simple research we can find out that a lot of athletes became famous because they were playing in their universities or collage team. So if we don't spend enough money in non-scientific activities, a lot of fresh talent won't be discovered.
Last but not least, there is an incorrect idea of assuming a university or a college as a place just to study and receive a degree. While I believe these places are also for having fun and enjoying our lives and this will eventually widen our horizon. For example when my university obligated us to do sports,I made a lot of friends and got to know a lot of interesting facts that made me change my field to a new one that I was not aware of before that sports activity.
So based on all the above mentioned points, I think that it is very important to allocate enough financial support for social activities and sports as well as classes and libraries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: most of the people; most people
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Suggestion: etc.
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Suggestion: twenty-one
...ocial activities or sports will perform twenty one percent better than a person who does n...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'if', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'i think', 'kind of', 'such as', 'as well as', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232815964523 0.229887763892 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.137472283814 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.106430155211 0.0866891130778 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0421286031042 0.046263068375 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0532150776053 0.0685040099705 78% => OK
Prepositions: 0.126385809313 0.118717715034 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0177383592018 0.0351676179071 50% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.87796395346 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0354767184035 0.0309702414327 115% => OK
Particles: 0.00221729490022 0.00188951952338 117% => OK
Determiners: 0.0864745011086 0.0887237588012 97% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0155210643016 0.0209618222197 74% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0155210643016 0.0139019557991 112% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2379.0 2387.08602151 100% => OK
No of words: 411.0 408.028673835 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.78832116788 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48200974243 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.340632603406 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.260340632603 0.251872472559 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.1800486618 0.174417080927 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.12895377129 0.112833075102 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87796395346 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515815085158 0.524397521467 98% => OK
Word variations: 57.6746176526 59.2087087015 97% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 24.1764705882 20.5533526081 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4135176904 48.84282405 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.941176471 120.699889404 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1764705882 20.5533526081 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.764705882353 0.644075263715 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 50.2105338486 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.61904761905 1.45489161554 111% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261733520659 0.300154397459 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0949766806821 0.103427244359 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0797882801017 0.0752933317313 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.541034864853 0.497263757937 109% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.147428968308 0.151897553556 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116221555158 0.114077575197 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114307821466 0.0781384742642 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.345753283815 0.336927656856 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.114576626635 0.067059652881 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175287491796 0.210909579961 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102276118032 0.0618886996521 165% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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