Some companies provide important products, but also damage the environment. Some people believe that the government should require more penalties, higher taxes, and larger fines of these companies, while others believe that there are better ways. Which one do you prefer?
Some people think that instead of implementing policies such as more penalties, higher taxes, and larger fines for companies which damage environment to protect the environment, there are better ways. However, I believe that such policies can be an effective way to protect the environment. This is because policies enable companies to reduce producing harmful substances for environment and to develop eco-friendly technologies.
First of all, the policy involving reinforced punishments enables company to reduce producing harmful substances immediately. This is because if the company do not follow the policy, their profit would declined which results in dissatisfaction of shareholders and negative effects to company's future. Consequently, they follow the policy immediately. For example, 10 years ago, the local government of Ulsan, the popular metropolitan city in Korea, decided to implement the policy including higher taxes and larger fines of companies which produced important products while damaging the environment. Since the companies worried declines in their profit, they followed the policy immediately which means the local government could protect the environment. In this regard, the policy can protect the environment.
Moreover, the policy enables companies to develop eco-friendly technology. Understanding the potential role of the policy is important to substantiate this view. For example, in Korea, the government concerned about the high level of carbon dioxide and harmful gas, so they suggested the policy including higher taxes and more penalties to purify the air contamination. Consequently, Hyundai Motors started to invest electric engine which is more friendly to the environment instead of gasoline engines. Nowadays, there are a lot of cars on street with electric engines in Korea, which means that they do not contaminate the air condition. In the regard, the punishment policy can protect the environment by motivating companies to develop eco-friendly technology.
To sum up I believe the punishment policy is a effective way to protect the environment. This is because it enables companies to reduce harmful substances immediately and to develop new eco-friendly technologies. Consequently, the importance of my view cannot be underestimated for the reasons that I have mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'decline'
Suggestion: decline
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Line 13, column 46, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.8115942029 4.8611393121 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18718553724 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469565217391 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.51630824373 125% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.945632785 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.388888889 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1666666667 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215299072336 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731496645655 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0915638468064 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14914082797 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802021483285 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.81 58.1214874552 46% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.42 10.9000537634 151% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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