In some countries, it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of these views?
In this day and age, people all around the world realize the importance of education as well as its benefits. However, the decision of when children should start their education is still a controversy. Some people insist that children ought to begin formal education at the age of four; however, others think that it is not appropriate to be a school-age child. I strongly appreciate the opinion of letting children go to school at the age of seven- the age that children have enough ability to pay attention and think logically.
To begin with, the ability of concentration varies among stages of ...development in children. It has been proved that a 4-year-old child can solely focus on its work within fifteen minutes, while a 9-year-old child can focus up to one hour. Concentration is one of the essential factors to decide the effectiveness of studies; therefore, it is best for children who are ready enough to start school. For example, when I was in kindergarten, my teachers determined that it was time to begin a formal education. Nevertheless, I could not pay attention to my teachers’ words even for five minutes. In short, concentration determines how fluent a class can execute.
Secondly, logical and abstract thinking only appears as children grow up, which plays an important role in studying. According to Jean Piaget’s theory of cognitive development, children are able to manipulate their logical thinking when they reach the third stage called the concrete operational stage - the stage that happens when children turn seven. This means that before the age of seven, children cannot absorb methods, which minimizes their studies. Furthermore, preschoolers are not ready to catch different perspectives; instead, they are more likely to persist with their opinions. To illustrate, it seems to be arduous for children to retrieve scientific information which derives from their teachers since they have not actually confronted it before.
In conclusion, it might be adequate for children to start school early. However, students need to wait for their mental development, namely concentration and logical thinking so as to produce their studies productively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, in short, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29022988506 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98650643663 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563218390805 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4898115205 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.294117647 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4705882353 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5882352941 5.45110844103 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215221863323 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675890982593 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471058470775 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118663872581 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487337492089 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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