In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this isa good idea? Support your' opinion by using specific reasons and details
Working in a job is always played significant role in each individual's life. We learn a lots of things while we work. Today, some parents ask the teenagers to work while they study. However, others believe that they should not study and focus only their classes. It is obvious that working in early age works children's advantage. I am with the former group and the lines will shed light on my viewpoint.
First of all, when students work in a job, they may gain the sense of responsibility; therefore, all of student should work in a part-time job. To working until a certain hour and earning amount of money is not tough. Students can learn that parent do not earn easily. The more importantly, kids study better, if they face the brutal reality of real life.
Secondly, in addition the importance of having responsibility, there are another subtle point which deserve some words. Many people have struggle with making a decent living. Due to cost of them, some people could not afford of their kids expenses. Teenagers may feel more free if they can ear their own money. According to the a recent research which conducted at Harvard University by the team of reputable scientist, the number of working teenagers has skyrocketed compared the last decades. What is more, these teenagers, who afford their expenses, do not like to depend their families and buy what they want.
To wrap it up, taking all aforementioned reasons into the account, one cannot the underestimate the importance of ealy working. On the one hand, Kids learn self-discipline, on the other hand they earn money. I consider that every toddler should work while they are studying.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: struggled
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in addition, first of all, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1326.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 271.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89298892989 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65492449339 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616236162362 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 618.680645161 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.8019242189 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.6666666667 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.0555555556 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143274076685 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454105619974 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034854832991 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.086090421929 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.016541922326 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.49 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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