In Some Countries, Teenagers Have Jobs While They Are Still Students. Do You Think This Is A Good Idea? Support Your Opinion By Using Specific Reasons And Details.

Teenage is a critical period of our kids lives, but it’s also an important phase that prepares them for the adulthood. Some people think that teenagers students should get part time jobs even if they are still students, but others refuses the concept of combining studies with work. I personally, strongly believe that teenager students should apply for part time jobs and go through that experience at least for sme months for three compelling reasons.

Firstly, part-time jobs can help teenager students, with their pocket money to cover some of their expanses. It’s a great way to teach teenagers the value of money, and give them an idea of efforts their parents make. Moreover part-time jobs teach teenagers how to deal with money and it gives them a sense of accomplishment since the money they get from the jobs is purely the result of their efforts.

Secondly, part-time jobs are a great way to learn soft skills. The interaction between the teenagers and the client on one hand and between the teenagers and their supervisors and colleagues on the other hand, helps develop a lot of skills and manners. I give the example of communication skills, team work, respect, punctuality and other skills that teenagers learn while working.

Lastly, part-time jobs prepare teenagers for adulthood. Part time jobs give an example of how jobs are. After graduating from high school or college these teenagers who became adults will need to get their first fulltime jobs and build their own lives. Small experiences such us part-time jobs can be a hugh help for them at job interviews, since they already gained the soft skills and communicational skills from previous part time jobs.

All things considered, part-time jobs for teenager students can bring a lot of positive results. It’s a great way to earn money, learn a lot of personal skills and prepare the teenagers to deal with different situations in life.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, while, at least, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.059375 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59264095265 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51875 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8871078481 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.933333333 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153537560696 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0680597274355 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410638112598 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968775569753 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273524394124 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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