Nowadays, the amount of money which is exchanging in some field of entertaining sports bring a big argument among people and different societies. In some field of entertaining sports athletes earn really more than usual. In my own view all of these athletes can not be judged by the same rules. Some of them deserve and other not because of following reasons.
First, paying this amount of salary in some entertainuing fields cause to developing and improving these sport field. For exmple, socer is one of most famous and desired sport field which draw alo of athletes and talented people to take do sport in this sport major, and this matter leads to emerging powerfull athletes in this sports. Thus, well paid athletes in some cases cause improving the field in which these athles are working.
Second, some of well payed entertainers are not deserve because of lack of any kind of effort. in these cases athletes and especially entertainers just using their famous charactor to draw attentions without specific try to bring something new. For instance, some retired athletes are attend to some wealthy football clubs, such as the Arab football clubs. The Athlethtion who are just use their charactor are not deserve to be over paied. In additin this amount of money in ayear as salary will change the poplic view point about all athletes who are active in the same field, and this point cause to damage all possitive sides.
In sum, to have a fair an realistic judgment about the million dollars which is paide for athletes in a year, the all sides nust be noted. Some of athletes which work hard to show the new abilities are deserve but others who are using only their famous character to attract fans and sponsereships and change the poplic view are not deserve to be paied this much. tHE GOVERNMENTS and who are in charge should consider this to modify and manage money in sport and entertaining areas.
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...ho are just use their charactor are not deserve to be over paied. In additin this amoun...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, so, thus, well, for instance, kind of, such as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 330.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80606060606 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41979895802 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490909090909 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 494.1 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0529872236 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.733333333 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250365139726 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916939066625 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0353589962576 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161469350128 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271335063256 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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