Education plays a pivotal role in our lives. It is believed that the more knowledge we gain, the more we will success in the future. Understanding this phenomena parents try variety of methods to encourage their children to study as much as possible. Some parents offer some money for their children according to each high grade they achieve. In my opinion, this is an excellent idea since parents can both give children motivation to study and teach them the meaning of money. I will explore my ideas in the following essay.
First of all, offering children some money is a great way to motivate them to study well. We all acknowledge that money is significant factor in our lives. We need money in many situations. Children also have a need of having money for their school’s needs and something they would like to buy, such as they want to buy toys or gifts for the birthday of their friends. Meanwhile, usually they do not dare to ask their parents for money. Therefore, if they know that their parents can give them money for their good marks, they will probably try their best in their studies. It looks like a positive way to earn money. My own experience is a compelling example of this case. When I was in high school, my parents used to give me money depending on great marks I achieved. They made a rule that if I gained the grades between 9 and 10, I could get 10 dollars, and 8 grade was 5 dollars. Therefore, I always studied diligently in order to get money from my parents. Many times I loved to play with my friends or participated in some club to have fun. But, I never went with my friends if I did not finish my homework and prepared carefully for next classes. As a result, I was the best student in my class in many years.
Alongside the reason above, another reason is worthy to consider is that by giving money for children, parents are teaching them the value of money. If children receive money without effort, they will not know how hard work their parents have to do to have money. However, when they have to study laboriously to get money, they will understand that earning money is not an easy task. Therefore, they will not spend money in vain.
In conclusion, there are various ways to teach children and encourage them in their studies. Giving them some money is a great idea because parents not only inspire their children to study well in order to gain as much knowledge as possible, but also teach them the value of money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ll success in the future. Understanding this phenomena parents try variety of method...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2024.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52796420582 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41811582774 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465324384787 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.7241586849 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.8461538462 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1923076923 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96153846154 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329672465039 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974725966084 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809832997092 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212100411088 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542449060541 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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