Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

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Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?

In technological world owning a smart phone has become necessary, but by whom it should be own that also does matter. In other words, although smart phone has valuable merits still children should not own a smartphone. According to me it is parent’s obligation to stop their children from owning a smart phone. I will explain my reasoning in detail in my ensuing paragraphs.
Cell phones have the power to distract young students doing their schoolwork. Rather than paying attention in class, students try to sneak opportunities to play on their phones. Instead of thinking about schoolwork, they obsessively text one another and try to check websites like Facebook, Instagram, WhatsApp, Snap Chat. This takes time away from valuable studying. This is a problem both during the school and afterwards, when youngsters should be working on their homework.
At the same time, smart phones can be extremely costly. Many plans require parents to pay unreasonably high monthly rates. At times, these rates can climb even higher if children use too much data due to things like downloading songs on the Internet. Rather than wasting money on a phone, parents should use such funds on better causes, like tutors for their children, or a home computer on which supervised learning can take place.
Finally, smart phones can be dangerous for young children. We are still unsure that medically what are the long-term effects of exposure of cell phones, particularly on vulnerable groups such as young children. It would be better to be safe than sorry. The less exposure children have to potential toxins, the better. At the same time, kids are sometimes targeted on social media sites by strangers. If parents allow young children to have smart phones, it might be difficult to protect them from these kinds of threats.
Let’s put in a nutshell, while older children may sometimes need cellphone to stay in touch with their parents or wise versa, , in this case, they do not require phone with internet access. In my consideration parents can guide their children in right direction by not allowing them owning a smart phone.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 220, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...l children should not own a smartphone. According to me it is parent's obligation to stop ...
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Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...n climb even higher if children use too much data due to things like downloading son...
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Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... touch with their parents or wise versa, , in this case, they do not require phone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, still, while, such as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07122507123 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64667239033 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60113960114 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8403726088 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7619047619 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7142857143 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.33333333333 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324188091266 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0943880405965 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776693363048 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183526120093 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663368932775 0.0645574589148 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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