Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
In the last decade or two, the technology has entered all spheres of our lives, while especially smartphones became part of our everyday routines. Some people argue that technology is highly addictive, hence parents should avoid buying them for their very young children, while others argue that they are unavoidable in the world today. In my opinion, it is important for children to sustain from the use of smart phones as long as possible. I feel this way for the two following reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, technology can very very dangerous if it is not used with caution. Since children brains are not as developed as brains of the adults, they might be in higher risks. In other words, small kids can easily be tricked to enter some extremely dangerous sites. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When me and my brother were young, we have encountered some websites on our smartphones that have later charged enormous amounts of money from our parents. Another example of the danger of smartphones is a case of a very young girl, that got targeted by the members of the ISIS group and soon became recruited by them. For this reason, I strongly believe that parents being children's guidance should know better than giving them smartphones at an early age.
Secondly, smart phone are very expensive, especially if being in the wrong hands. More importantly, children are to young to know the real price of phone calls or the devices themselves and can therefore abuse them with the high price for the parents. There are multiple examples from my childhood that are the proof of that. For instance, one of my friends has received a call from a foreign country when she was really young and her parents ended up paying a large sum of money to cover for the bill. Accordingly, I think that it is better to give smartphones to children when they are older, or old enough to understand their real value.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is better for parents to forbid those electronic devices while kids are small. This is because this technology can be very dangerous for children, but also very expensive for the parents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78421052632 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52865023721 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531578947368 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.1395493202 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.94444444444 5.45110844103 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263259684868 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816219460789 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548795570597 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170724648602 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358202736599 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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