Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is undeniable that parents always make efforts to help their children to be successful in the future. Working hard at school and obtaining high grades are two key points that play main roles in students' success. Although some parents would rather pay money to their children for each high mark they obtained, I am not convinced that this would guarantee kids' achievements in the future. From my vantage point, it is more effective if parents make a policy for rewarding their children and motivate them to do other positive activities besides getting high grades.
Firstly, having a general reward system is so influential on youths' behavior. Indeed, reward system may include variety of prizes and gifts; some emotional activities such as hugging children and kissing them or physical prize such as buying some special gifts for them. In my opinion, limiting the prize system to just giving money would reduce child's motivation in a long period, since it prevents a child to gain other kinds of gift. Moreover, children will always care about money in their life and they will not take into account other facets of life.
In addition, strong concentration on high grades is not appropriate, since it makes children to feel that it is the most important thing for their parents. As a result, they would do even negative actions to achieve high marks such as cheating. On the other hand, mothers and fathers should teach their children that other proper behavior are as important as high grades and can be compromised by them. For example, they can be rewarded if they also help their friends in their study group. This would let their children to not just focus on high grades without concentration on other decent doings.
To conclude, giving money to kids is not the best choice to encourage them to study hard and get high grade. Creating a reward rule and motivating children to do decent behavior are so beneficial to them to achieve their goals in upcoming years.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youths'' or 'youth's'?
Suggestion: youths'; youth's
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'for example', 'in addition', 'such as', 'as a result', 'in my opinion', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.232876712329 0.229887763892 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.161643835616 0.158761421928 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.115068493151 0.0866891130778 133% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0575342465753 0.046263068375 124% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0794520547945 0.0685040099705 116% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117808219178 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0465753424658 0.0351676179071 132% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.44687749328 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0438356164384 0.0309702414327 142% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0493150684932 0.0887237588012 56% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0301369863014 0.0209618222197 144% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0027397260274 0.0139019557991 20% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1981.0 2387.08602151 83% => OK
No of words: 336.0 408.028673835 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.89583333333 5.86048508987 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48200974243 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.357142857143 0.338922669872 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.25 0.251872472559 99% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.16369047619 0.174417080927 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0833333333333 0.112833075102 74% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44687749328 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526785714286 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 55.6516831387 59.2087087015 94% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 22.4 20.5533526081 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7582003027 48.84282405 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.066666667 120.699889404 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.5533526081 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.933333333333 0.644075263715 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 47.4 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.33027522936 1.45489161554 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327870472245 0.300154397459 109% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0901610499385 0.103427244359 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0537187798562 0.0752933317313 71% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.525857375311 0.497263757937 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.140753804518 0.151897553556 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128508384437 0.114077575197 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053771385199 0.0781384742642 69% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.260101009167 0.336927656856 77% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0177708513224 0.067059652881 27% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223147571658 0.210909579961 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590304154053 0.0618886996521 95% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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