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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

Essay topics: Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?

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As everything in life is like a coint that has two different slides, people must weigh the pros and cons before jumping to conclusions. After all, each and every topic or question requires a careful deliberation in that there are mutliple variable to a truth. Eventhough some may adamantly believe students shouldn't be awarded for every high grade they get in school, I believe this opinion lacks coherence to some extent. In my humble opinion, I strongly believe parent have to give their children money when they get high grades in school due to the following reasons.

First and foremost, giving money for student for each high grade can engender a myriad of advantages. The main reason behind this rationale is that students like being awarded for their efforts and energy. In other words, giving money for children will incentive them to do good at school. Moreover, there are a lot of distractions for children, thereby preventing them from focusing on school such as, video games and social media. To illustrate more thoroughly, My cousin Ahmad has a child his name is Jack. Jack is studting in Al-kahder School. However, there are several complains from the school because his bad grades. Therefore, his dad Ahmad asked me for advice. so I told him tell Jack that you will give him money for each good grade. As a result, Jack started doing more efforts in order to get high grades. All in all, we cant and shouldn't overlook the upsides of encourage students in school.

On top of this, Not rewarding children's for their efforts in school can result in unfavorable ramifications. In the eyes of many people in present day sociey, children will shape our society in the future. so we must make sure to introduce the right way for them to follow. In other words, children is subjected to many things that may effect their grades in shcool. So most parents should offer money for their childrens in order to encourage him, thereby getting good grades. A great example of this would be my little borther Fares who always get good grades in school. Subsequently, he started complaining about not giving him anything for his good grades like his friend Mosa. Subsequently, My mother started buying for him toys and video games owing to the fact that he started refusing to study. Long story short, it's clear as day to me not rewarding children for their efforts in studying can be detrimental.

In summation, yes, it's virtually impossible to provide a completly satisfying answer to an open-ended question. Although the jury may be out in this given essay, but we can come to a mutual agreement that offering money to children's for each high grade is beneficial due to the following reasons and details mentioned above.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, after all, such as, as a result, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84796573876 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5397264998 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52034261242 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.135510899 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0769230769 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9615384615 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.442436396271 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116100996924 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895655247894 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266456954751 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680782486841 0.0645574589148 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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