Due to advances in the Industrialisation and communication technolojies, the World has became more global compared last century. As the World becomes more global, companies sell products all over the World. With the advent of internet, the compaines sells product more and more. But these trend will eventually stop because of limited source. Some people think that new product technolojies harm the Earth. Others say that this is fallacies people use sustainable technolojies when they product their goods. I believe that Earth is reeal really getting worse by human activities. I have several reasons for having reasons.
First of all, I believe that People do not use sustainable technolojies due to higly cost of its. For example, We commute by car or public transportation. They are working with fuel oil. We need to electricty to connect internet or use celll phone. To product electricity we need dams. People will eventually use up these energy sources. In order to stop this people and companies should use sustainable processes such as wind power or sun power. Furthermore, The wind and sun power is free. The goverment should support and allocate these process as long as people deplete our nature resources.
Secondly, in addition to the importance of sustainable process the pollution is one of important challange. People pollute our worlds such as chemical or noise pollution. At this point education of people is gain importance. If goverment tell the importance of nature to the children at the schools, it will help at the short term. Thus next generation might use nature friendly product. For example when I was in high school i had a class about the importance of nature. These class raised our awardness about nature. I remember that i argued with my mother because we did not use nature nature friendly product.
To sum up, i think nature is being harmed by human activities in order to stop these process people people should use sustainable process and get education at high schools
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...mmunication technolojies, the World has became more global compared last century. As t...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... these energy sources. In order to stop this people and companies should use sustain...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...chools, it will help at the short term. Thus next generation might use nature friend...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
.... For example when I was in high school i had a class about the importance of nat...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...awardness about nature. I remember that i argued with my mother because we did no...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: nature
...d with my mother because we did not use nature nature friendly product. To sum up, i think...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
... nature friendly product. To sum up, i think nature is being harmed by human a...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: people
...tivities in order to stop these process people people should use sustainable process and get ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, i think, in addition, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06990881459 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76810097642 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54103343465 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7652805492 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.1538461538 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.6538461538 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57692307692 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128049501911 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352114570158 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0653228937596 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093038146318 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060560129213 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 58.1214874552 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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