Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
Since tha ancient era until modern times, art and music played vital role in each society. People reflected their feelings by the help of them sometimes to a cave wall another times, to a canvas or sing. Many people consider that there are more significant lessons than them for kids at the stage of learning new knowledge. From my vantage point, I believe that they should be required to study at early of school. The lines will shed on light my viewpoint.
The first reason which deserves some word to say is about its effect on creativity. Actually, music and art increase creativity and boost analytical thinking. These abilities will be helpful for students in their future. According to the recent study, conducted at MIT University by the team of reputable scientists, many high scale managers have high sense of art and can play a musical instrument. Music helps managers interms of multi way thinking and make easy to manage a company. Consequently, study demonstrates the importance of art and music in work life.
Secondly, approaching this issue,apart from what mentioned about, there is another point which cross in my mind. Music has positive effects on person's health. Listening music reduce stress and ease tension and balance blood sugar. Students can be more motivate if music is a part of their life. furthermore, they are prevent kids from doing triffling activities and keep student in a railways. As a result, Music not only protect them bad habit but also keeps sharp student's mind
Thirdly, lack of sense of fine arts in the school puts students at a disadvantge in the social life. It becomes individual less sensitive in their private life. Thay make peole more human and emotional. What more, fine arts grab student's attention to the school and might make them more successfull.
To wrap it up, taking all aforementioned reasons into account, it would be concluded that one connot live without art and music. Schools should allocate more times for them since its importance. Even parent should teach at home.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, apart from, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 342.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56427914096 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.631578947368 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8540967178 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.347826087 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8695652174 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21739130435 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218637155045 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595512353993 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499956329275 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122267603315 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273492183564 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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